Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-05
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Yes,I agree with this opinion that music brings people of different cultures and ages together.
As we see during present day when different musical concerts has arranged than people from differnt corner of world at of differnt ages travel to attend these concerts.People enjoys listenting to music and by joining that kind of musical concerts they have chance to meet people having differnt cultures.So, music definetly is playing important role to bring people close to each other.
According to my knowledge there is also no restriction of any ages,people of every age come and enjoy the music
One of the biggest example that come into my mind that how music plays important role in bringing people of different ages together is that the people of Pakistan and India both have totally different cultures but they have ssame taste in music and likes approximately same type of music.Indian people are very big fans of Pakistani music and singers just like that Pakistani people are also fans of Indian music and singers.
When a Pakistani singer or Indian singer arrange a musical concert in all over the world people from India and Pakistan join the concert and enjoys together.People living in abroad of different nation also join concert and enjoy the music only beyond the differnt culturs,ages and nation.
I also experience a concert in my germany and the people from different cultures join concert. I met peole from India,Pakistan,Turkey,Canada,America and may countries having totally different cultures and ages.Some old people were also enjoying the the concert.So,music definely brings people close.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0
The response addresses all parts of the task, presenting an overall clear position in agreement with the prompt. Relevant ideas are introduced, such as how music transcends cultural boundaries between nations like India and Pakistan, and how it unites people of different ages. However, some ideas remain under-developed or somewhat repetitive. For instance, the discussion regarding age barriers is stated multiple times without deep elaboration, and the examples provided, while relevant, lack full extension. To move to a higher band, the writer needs to fully develop all main points with more extended explanations and richer, more specific examples rather than relying on general assertions.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The essay displays a coherent overall arrangement, and the writer attempts to group ideas into paragraphs with a clear stance on the topic. However, progression is sometimes hindered by mechanical or faulty cohesion and abrupt transitions between sentences and ideas, such as in the paragraph starting with 'When a Pakistani singer or Indian singer arrange...' where referencing and linking feel disjointed. Furthermore, paragraphing is not always used effectively to separate distinct thoughts, leading to a somewhat fragmented structure. To achieve a higher band, the writer must ensure logical progression throughout and employ a wider range of cohesive devices more accurately and naturally.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting some less common words and phrases such as 'transcend', 'cultures', and 'beyond the different cultures'. However, there are numerous lexical inaccuracies and word-form errors that appear throughout the text, including 'differnt' for different, 'listenting' for listening, 'definetly' for definitely, 'ssame' for same, and 'arranges' instead of arrange. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they reflect a limited control over spelling and word choice. To reach the next level, the writer needs to expand their lexical repertoire and eliminate frequent spelling and word-formation errors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response features a mix of simple and some attempted complex sentence forms, demonstrating basic structural variety. However, there are frequent grammatical errors in verb forms, subject-verb agreement, and articles throughout the text. Examples include 'when different musical concerts has arranged than people', 'is also no restriction of any ages', 'One of the biggest example that come into my mind', and 'I also experience a concert in my germany'. These errors require some effort to decode and prevent the writing from achieving a higher level of grammatical control. To improve, the student must work on sentence construction, tense consistency, and basic grammatical accuracy.
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