Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Most of the people is strongly belive that music is best way to share emotions with others, even they belog to different culture and ages. This essy will discuss and shre my openion.

Music is a versatile in all time and it has no limit and boundaries. All over the world people love their clutural music and they use in their cultural events. Is is the tool that people used to heal their emotions and feelings. Forexample, our goverment organise cultural and musical events in shahi qila, where a lot of people come to explore tradition and enjoy music, surprisingly the performers are belong to different cultures but we love listening.

Many languages and various tools are used in music, morever, young generation love pop up music while, older love to hear clasical music. In current situation, a medical student who sing a song in saraiki and get fame on social media, but the surprisingly, everyone is loved that voive even they cannot understand proper wording of song. This is the beauty of music that everyone love hear them even they do not know language of music.

In conclusion, music is an art and the musicians are well performed. Different languages and style use in it but everyone love and pleased to feel it. So that statement is tru music is one of the best way to bringing people of different cultures and ages together.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address the topic and give a clear overall view that music can unite people across cultures and ages. The examples of cultural events at Shahi Qila and a Saraiki singer whose song is enjoyed by people who do not understand the words are relevant and help illustrate this position. However, the opening says the essay will discuss the issue without clearly stating how far you agree, and the age-related point about young people preferring pop and older people preferring classical music is not fully connected to how music brings them together. The response is also 23 words below the required minimum; the eight words copied from the task prompt are not counted. Develop your explanation and add a further supporting detail to address the task more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion. The examples are placed in relevant paragraphs, and phrases such as “For example” and “In conclusion” help signal the direction of the discussion. However, progression between ideas is sometimes unclear. The paragraph about different age groups lists musical preferences but does not explain the connection to bringing people together, while “In current situation” introduces the singer example without a clear link to the preceding point. Some linking is repetitive or awkward, including repeated use of “everyone” and “but.” Make each paragraph develop one main point, and use clearer references and transitions to show how each example supports your position.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “cultural events,” “tradition,” “performers,” “emotions,” and “different cultures.” These choices show an attempt to discuss music and its social role, and the examples give the response some specific language. However, the range is limited and several spelling errors or inaccurate word choices make parts difficult to read, such as “belive,” “clutural,” “essy,” and “voive.” Some phrases are also unnatural, for example “pop up music,” “the beauty of music,” and “musicians are well performed.” Aim for accurate spelling and more natural collocations, such as “pop music,” “performers give strong performances,” and “music transcends language barriers.” This would make your ideas clearer and more precise.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, including a contrast between younger and older listeners and a sentence explaining that people enjoy a song despite not understanding its words. However, grammatical errors are frequent, and some sentences are difficult to follow. Examples include “Most of the people is,” “the performers are belong,” and “everyone is loved that voice”; these show problems with agreement, verb forms and sentence construction. Articles and plurals are also often missing or inaccurate, as in “music is best way” and “one of the best way.” Punctuation around longer sentences is sometimes unclear. Practise building accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then add subordinate clauses, checking agreement, articles and verb forms carefully.

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