Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Some people believe that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. In my oppinion, music is a better way to reduce stress and anxiety, and it also have positive effect on your mental satisfaction and wellbeing so i am completly agree with that the music combine people of different cultures and ages togather.

Initially, music was used to earn money and for providing entertainment. However, at that time people also sit togather to listen music which make a bond in them. Moreover, many rulers love to listen music after the bettle because they though that it is a best way to calibrate their success. For example, the mughal king bhabur shah zafer was a great fan of poetry and music even there are many books which were wrotten by him.

Nowaday, every person are prefer to listen music when he is fall into stress and anxiety. However, nowaday people prefer to listen the music on their phones and laptop while some people are prefer to go to the music group for inner satisfaction. They gathering of music have many kind of people which is related to diiferent ages and cultures but sit togather to listen the music.For example, In the proformense of national singer of palistan sir nusrat fatah ali khan there are to much crown which include sikhs, muslims and chistans. Although the are coming from diferent religion and culture they sit togather to enjoy the music.

In conclusion, people coming from different cultures and religion are connected with the music so we should want to force our children to gofor music classes which is best for their mental wellbeing.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address the question and make your position clear: you agree that music can bring people of different cultures and ages together. The example of audiences at Nusrat Fateh Ali Khan’s performances, including people from different religious backgrounds, is relevant and helps support this view. You also explain that people gather to listen to music, although the link to different age groups could be made more explicit. Some material is less focused on the question: the opening emphasis on stress and wellbeing and the historical discussion of rulers and Babur Shah Zafar do not fully explain how music connects cultures and generations. Develop these points with clearer reasons and examples directly tied to the question.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and the ideas generally move from music’s past to its present-day role. You use linking expressions such as “Moreover,” “However” and “For example” to signal relationships between points. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear: the discussion of rulers’ celebrations shifts away from the main argument, and the present-day paragraph moves between personal listening, group gatherings and the concert example without clear connections. Some linking is mechanical or confusing, particularly the repeated “However” and the sentence beginning “They gathering of music.” Use clearer topic sentences and connect each example explicitly to the claim it supports.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “stress and anxiety,” “mental wellbeing,” “different cultures” and “inner satisfaction.” These choices make your main ideas understandable. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, collocation and spelling errors make parts of the response difficult to follow, such as “calibrate their success,” “music group” and “to much crown.” There are also repeated basic terms such as “music,” “people” and “together.” Aim to use more precise expressions for shared musical experiences and audience diversity, and check spelling carefully. More accurate collocations would help you express your ideas clearly without changing their meaning.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including clauses introduced by “although” and “because,” and the overall meaning can usually be followed. However, control is inconsistent, especially in verb agreement, tense and sentence construction. For example, “it also have positive effect” needs a correctly formed verb and article, while “every person are prefer” combines incompatible verb forms. The sentence “Although the are coming … they sit together” also has an unclear subject and faulty clause structure. Punctuation is sometimes missing, as in the run-on around “listen the music.For example.” Practise building accurate sentences first, then add subordinate clauses and check agreement, articles and punctuation.

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