Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In a modern days, music has benefited very nicely in positive ways. Music is very stress relief, rejuvenating and very peaceful. It brings people of different cultures and ages together as some people thing. I strongly agree with this idea. As from the different culture or people of different mentalities dance or vibe on any song repertoire accompany the singer or listen to he same music.

At the first, Not these days but since older time people used like listened or danced of different culture. The songs strongly impacts on the soul on both young and older people. But as compare to older people young generation has vibes more then them on the diff king of songs without seen single line of lyrics of song. But on other side older ones wants to understand the lyrics and the meaning of the song. Young people's music taste's continues changes throughout the time.

Furthermore, There are different kind of music in every culture or any language. Some people like to vibe on only melody or any background song without lyrics. whereas some like the songs that without any music or tune that gives them relief. Many songs or nationality is popular for their energy and also dance. For example if a talk about south song they are at the global level nowadays specially, they have dance people internationally. They are very popular for energetic dance or tune of their music. So music is the best key bringing people together.

In conclusion, Every kind of music plays different role in every person's soul. It has no disadvantage to vibe on that. It's only brings people together and enjoys together. At last people will come on a common path from the melody whether they understand or not any music.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear: you strongly agree that music can bring people together, and you give relevant points about shared listening, dancing, and music crossing cultural boundaries. The example of South Indian music becoming popular internationally helps connect your argument to the question. However, the response addresses the idea only partially because several points are asserted rather than explained. For instance, the contrast between young people responding to a song’s energy and older people attending to lyrics is not clearly linked to how music unites different ages. Develop this with a specific situation or example, and explain more directly how shared musical experiences overcome cultural or age differences.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and signposts such as “Furthermore” and “In conclusion” help identify sections. However, the overall progression is not always clear: the discussion moves from stress relief to age differences, then to types of music and South Indian songs without consistently showing how each point supports the central claim. Some linking phrases are awkward or repetitive, including “At the first” and “But on other side,” and references such as “they” in the example are not fully clear. Organise each body paragraph around one main reason, then use a clear explanation and example to connect it back to the question.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt a range of topic-related vocabulary, including “rejuvenating,” “lyrics,” “melody,” and “internationally,” and these choices show an effort to discuss music and its effects. However, the range is limited by frequent inaccurate or unnatural word combinations that sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “music is very stress relief,” “dance or vibe on any song repertoire,” and “they have dance people internationally.” Some words are also used imprecisely, as in “nationality” where you appear to mean a musical tradition or genre. Aim for natural collocations and check that each word expresses the intended idea; precise, familiar vocabulary is more effective than uncertain phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, including a contrast between younger and older listeners and a concluding statement about music bringing people together. However, complex sentences are often faulty, and frequent errors in basic structures can make the reader work to understand your meaning. For example, “It’s only brings people together” has an incorrect verb pattern, while “young generation has vibes more then them” has problems with agreement and sentence construction. Articles, plurals and punctuation are also inconsistent, as in “At the first, Not these days.” Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with clauses using clear connectors such as “while” and “because.”

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