Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Many people says that song is good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. Overview, some people like different types of music and some people has different culture.its depened on culture what they like or dislike.Music is a universal language.

overall, it has been connected different kinds of age group and dfifferent cultures together.

In this figure, the music is one of the most powerfull way of bringing people of generation and different culture together.The music bridge culture has been some kinds of bridge like: universal emotion,culture fusion and breaking barriers.As well as, first one the universal emotions: joy, sadness and longing understood world wide through tempo and key. The other one culture fusion: iconic genreze and hip-hop were born from the different culture and global phenomena. finally, and the last one breaking berriers: sharing a performing music and build emepathy between some kins of communities.

Furthermore,the music is a good way of bringing people. Actually. music hass been sharing emotion moments for ourself and it has no age limit. Because, i see near my hometown some kinds of people listning the music for mind relaxation and releife our stress. Because, it is very happy and enjoy the moment together listen the sounds. In addition, the international level a lot of people like music,sound, and beats, and enjoy every moment. Others, the music has been usaully use for many function like evetns, parties, fumctions,club and gym.Finally, it hass been use for different music on functions and depend on culture what they cultutre and what they like.

In conclusion, i like it and some people like good way of music in different culture.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You take a generally positive position, stating that “Music is a universal language” and that it brings generations and cultures together. You also give relevant supporting points, including shared emotions, cultural fusion, and people listening for relaxation. However, the response only partially develops the argument: the examples about hip-hop and your hometown are mentioned briefly, without explaining clearly how they unite people of different ages or cultures. Your position is also less clear in the conclusion, “i like it and some people like good way of music,” which does not directly state the extent of your agreement. Develop one or two examples in more detail and maintain a clear, consistent answer to the question.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has an introduction, supporting paragraphs, and a conclusion, and it uses signposts such as “Furthermore” and “In conclusion.” These features give it some organisation. However, progression between ideas is difficult to follow: the first paragraph shifts quickly from differences in musical taste to culture, while the second introduces “In this figure” even though no figure is part of the task. Several transitions are repetitive or awkward, including repeated uses of “Because” and “Finally,” and some sentences do not connect clearly to the point before them. Group related ideas into focused paragraphs, use linking expressions only when they show a genuine relationship, and make references between sentences clearer.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “universal language,” “culture fusion,” “breaking barriers,” and “mind relaxation.” These phrases show an effort to express ideas beyond very basic statements. However, the range is limited and many word-choice, collocation, and spelling errors make parts of the response difficult to understand, such as “powerfull way,” “genreze,” “emepathy,” and “reliefe our stress.” Some expressions are also unnatural, for example “sharing a performing music” and “different music on functions.” Build accuracy by learning common word partnerships related to music and social connection, and check spelling and word forms carefully. More precise vocabulary would help you explain your examples clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt some longer sentences and use basic connectors to express reasons, as in “Because, i see near my hometown…” However, sentence structures are limited, and errors in agreement, articles, verb forms, and sentence boundaries occur frequently enough to make reading difficult. Examples include “Many people says,” “some people has,” and “it has been connected different kinds of age group.” Several fragments or incorrectly punctuated sentences also interrupt meaning, such as “Actually. music hass been sharing emotion moments…” Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with clauses using “because,” “which,” or “while.” Check subject–verb agreement and ensure each sentence has a complete main clause.

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