Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Few individuals belives that music is a great path of bringing humans of contrast cultures and ages jointly. On the other hand remains are not agree with that so i will give you my opinion in following paragraph.

In my opinion, I totally agree with this statment because music is the best way to make mind relex and stress free. In this contemprary era, time changes fastly where new type of music arrived like Hip-hop music, rape music, pop music, rock music, clasical music everyday and everyone had thier own choice but the intresting thing is all the artist promote their music and songs on social media platform like Instagram and Facebook which has been used by youngers as well as elders. Not only letest lounched music but also 90s songs are also popular with new trendy background effects which attract the gen-z to listen.

Moreover, the famous British singer Ed Sheeran came to India last year to explore it. He came over here mat famouse celebrities, artists, cricketers, singers and spent his quality time with locals also. He was very happy in india with the love of indian people and he decied to make a english song for us and he made a song called Shaphier. This song was sung by Ed Sheeran and Arijit Singh where Arijit is a Indian singer and collobration of both was soo viral and song had high popularity in India.

In conclusion, Songs and Music from diffrent culture and timeline can erase the agegap and boundrise in between the humans. That is why I am totally agree with the statment that Music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear: you strongly agree that music can connect people across cultures and ages, and the discussion of social media and the Ed Sheeran–Arijit Singh collaboration is relevant. However, the response addresses the task only partially because it does not explain the connecting effect in enough depth. The first example mainly says that people of different ages use social media and enjoy both new and older songs; explain how sharing or discussing this music brings them together. The second example could show more clearly how the collaboration introduced listeners to another culture. The claim that music reduces stress is less directly connected to the question. Develop each example with a clear link to your position and keep the focus on cultural and generational connection.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and the ideas generally remain on the topic. Paragraphs also have distinct purposes: one discusses music across generations, while the next gives a collaboration example. However, progression within the paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow. The opening sentence, “On the other hand remains are not agree,” introduces an opposing view that is not developed, then the essay moves directly to agreement. Connect ideas more clearly: explain how social media exposure leads different age groups to share music, and how the collaboration connects cultures. Linking phrases such as “Moreover” and “In conclusion” help, but some transitions feel mechanical; use clearer references and logical links between claims and examples.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt topic-related vocabulary, including “social media platform,” “background effects,” “collaboration,” and “popularity,” and you refer to several music genres. This gives you some useful range, but inaccurate spelling and word choice are frequent enough to make parts of the message harder to read. Examples include “belives,” “statment,” “contemprary,” “intresting,” and “collobration.” Some phrases are also unnatural or unclear, such as “a great path of bringing humans” and “erase the agegap and boundrise.” Choose more precise collocations, for example, “a powerful way to bring people together” and “bridge generational and cultural divides.” Proofread carefully and avoid unclear genre labels; the intended meaning of “rape music” is uncertain.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use some longer sentence forms, including a sentence beginning “Not only…” and a relative clause in “where Arijit is a Indian singer,” but control is inconsistent. Errors in sentence structure, verb forms, agreement and articles occur throughout. For example, “Few individuals believes” has a subject–verb agreement problem, while “I am totally agree” uses an incorrect verb pattern; write “I totally agree.” The opening also contains an incomplete or unclear construction: “On the other hand remains are not agree with that.” Several sentences join many ideas with “and” or commas, making relationships difficult to follow. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then add controlled complex structures, and check tense consistency, articles and punctuation when editing.

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