Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

It is stated that some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. However, in my opinion, I believe meaningful songs and music can different types of diversities togesther; it is the most suitable option and I stongly agree with this point.

Nowadays with globalization and technological development may bringing people of different countries, different cultures and different traditions as a approximately same way. Music is a universal lanugane that brings people from diverse cultural backgrounds together. For example, improve mutual understanding. That is to say, every nation has defferent lanuages and own traditions. Also, meaningful songs can help people understand other nation's traditions and cultures better. Not only that, music is a perfect way of reduce cultural barriers and cultural apprciation. Namely, some of countries have cultural barriers. Most poetry sowcases their history, nation and cultures. So, songs with emotional and meaningful lyrics can help reduce cultural and traditional barriers and even people can share their traditions with other nation's people as well.

On the other hand, to improve the music in a better way individuals and the govenment can promote. For example, individuals can share meaningful music with other nation's freiends and commities. These days social media platforme is become a strong. So, people can share post and vedios into the socialmedia. In additon, the government can promote tradional music worldwide. As a consequence, musicions can improve their abitiles. Besides this, this leads to positively effects for all inidividuals around the world.

In conslusion, music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and tradition together. It gets many benefits for all humans. To improve the cultural bond, people can help in a defferent ways.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

Your position is clear overall: you strongly agree that music can bring people together, and you discuss cultural understanding and ways individuals and governments could promote music. These points are relevant, but the response only partially develops the task. The main explanation that songs help people understand traditions is repeated in several forms, while the role of music in connecting people of different ages is not addressed. The suggestions about social media and government promotion also shift towards how music can be promoted rather than explaining how it unites people. Develop distinct reasons, including an example that shows people of different generations sharing music, and explain how each supports your view.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, body paragraphs presenting ideas, and a conclusion. Linking expressions such as “For example,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion” help signal stages of the response. However, progression within paragraphs is often unclear: “For example, improve mutual understanding” is a fragment, and the paragraph moves from globalization to traditions and poetry without clearly connecting each point. “On the other hand” suggests a contrasting argument, but the paragraph mainly offers recommendations, not an opposing view. Some ideas are repeated, particularly the claim that music reduces cultural barriers. Organise each paragraph around one clear reason, then explain and illustrate it with a relevant example.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “cultural backgrounds,” “mutual understanding,” “cultural barriers,” and “traditions.” These choices show an attempt to discuss the topic beyond very basic terms. However, the range is limited and several noticeable spelling and word-choice errors make parts difficult to read, such as “lanugane,” “defferent,” “sowcases,” and “abitiles.” Some phrases are also unnatural or imprecise, including “improve the music in a better way,” “social media platforme is become a strong,” and “positively effects.” Aim for accurate collocations and check spelling carefully. More precise expressions for musical exchange and intergenerational connection would also help you explain your ideas clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, and the response includes some subordinate clauses, such as “Although” is not used, but “So, songs with emotional and meaningful lyrics can help…” develops a reason. However, the range of sentence structures is limited, and attempts at longer constructions are often faulty. For example, “Nowadays with globalization and technological development may bringing people…” lacks a clear subject and has an incorrect verb form; “For example, improve mutual understanding” is not a complete sentence; and “social media platforme is become a strong” has an incorrect verb construction. There are also problems with articles, agreement, and sentence boundaries. Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, then check verb forms and agreement.

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