Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

nowadays, music is like a therapy and it is a good way to bringing of people togather in one place .

in my prespective,i am totally agree with that music is a way of get togather.

firstly,music is therapy of enjoyment for the youngs as well as the children.

children are also enjoy the music.

for instance,when we talking about a party the first option that we choose is a music and types of music.

our parents likes to hear the cultural music and children are also likes the music like cartoon,rhymes and poems music.without music, the concept of party is impossible.

in additon, our culture is also representing by music .

because cultural music is understandable for all the age group as its in our language.

either they are youngs or old.

moreover,in wedding music is like a backbone because its a source of enjoyment .

some people feels relax by listening the music .

the melody of music brings us close to our culture .

music is like source of energy.

for instance when we are sad or bore we plays music

even when we do our routine work like cleaning of the kitchen ,washing of the clothes and outher household works we plays music

we enjoys the work as well as music.

in conculsion,i can say that music is therapy for me to get rid of tensions of daily life . whenever i feel bore and exhauste jus sit in my room and put my earpods in my ears and listen the track that i like most.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear: you strongly agree that music can bring people together, and you give relevant examples involving parties, weddings, cultural music, and listening while doing household tasks. These examples show how music can be enjoyed across ages and can connect people with their culture. However, the response only partly develops the central idea of people from different cultures and ages coming together. For example, the party and household-work examples mainly describe personal enjoyment, rather than explaining how people interact or overcome cultural differences through music. Develop one or two examples further and explicitly link them to both age groups and cultures to make your support more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a recognisable sequence: it states your opinion, gives several supporting points, and ends with a personal conclusion. Connectors such as “firstly,” “in addition,” and “moreover” help signal new points. However, ideas are often presented as a series of short statements, and the progression between them is not always clear. The discussion moves from parties to cultural music, weddings, and household chores without grouping these into distinct, developed paragraphs. Some links are also unclear, such as “either they are youngs or old” after the point about language. Organise the response into clear paragraphs, each focused on one reason, and use linking phrases to explain how each example supports your main argument.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use a basic range of relevant vocabulary, including “cultural music,” “melody,” “source of energy,” and “daily life,” which allows the reader to understand your main points. There are also attempts to express ideas beyond simple enjoyment, such as music representing culture and helping people relax. However, vocabulary is repetitive, especially “music,” “enjoyment,” and “source,” and several word choices or collocations are unnatural, including “therapy of enjoyment,” “the concept of party,” and “put my earpods in my ears.” Spelling errors such as “togather,” “prespective,” and “conculsion” are noticeable. Build a wider set of natural phrases for describing music’s social and cultural effects, and check spelling and collocations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

Most of your sentences use simple structures, and the main message is generally understandable. You attempt some longer sentences, for example the sentence beginning “even when we do our routine work,” but control becomes less reliable as clauses are added. Errors occur frequently in verb forms and agreement: “I am totally agree,” “children are also enjoy,” and “our parents likes.” Articles, plurals, and sentence boundaries also need attention, as in “in wedding” and the run-on sequence about feeling sad, playing music, and doing chores. Practise accurate present-simple forms and build longer sentences from correctly joined clauses. Consistent capitalisation and punctuation will also make your ideas easier to follow.

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