Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowadays, some people believe that music is a good way of bringing individuals from different cultures and countries and different ages together. I strongly agree with this opinion, everyone has relate with music from different cultures are enjoy the music. I think music plays a very important role in our life to reduce stress and makes happy and also help to bringing people from different countries together. I believe that music is not just an art , its beyound the world. Every cultures feels the music without knowing their language they can just enjoy the music at present moment. Similarly, they contributed a very important role in our daily life and helps to reduce stress and take off the mind from daily problems and feel freshed when we are listening a music. For example, doing concerts in our country is best way of bringing people from different cultures . As a result, we can improve our economy and represent our counrty at international level and demands our singer at global level and trending their songs on spotify. However, singers attracts their audience with their beautiful voices and we forgot our stress and enjoy the moment . Different group of ages that are agree to same page that the main reason is music . Cultures are different and their way of singing also different . For instance, music bringing together people from different cultures and may develop kind for each other and caring for their ages of group. In conclusion, music can improve the sense of caring and kind relationship with others. Moreover, different cultures are introducing and promote our country at good level. In my opinion music play very important role in our life and bringing people together at same platform.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear: you strongly agree that music can bring people together, and you give relevant reasons, including shared enjoyment across language barriers and the social atmosphere of concerts. The response also refers to both cultural differences and age groups. However, these points are only partly developed. The concert example shifts toward economic benefits and promoting the country, without explaining in detail how people of different ages connect there. The claim that music encourages care and kindness is also asserted rather than supported with a specific example. To strengthen the response, explain each main reason more fully and use a concrete example to show how music creates interaction between people from different backgrounds.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and signposts such as “Similarly,” “For example,” and “In conclusion” show an attempt to guide the reader. However, ideas are not arranged coherently enough: the first body paragraph moves from stress relief to concerts, the economy, and international recognition, while the second shifts between singers, stress, age groups and cultural understanding. Some links are unclear, as in “they contributed a very important role,” where the reference is difficult to follow. Several sentences also repeat the general claim that music brings people together rather than advancing the argument. Give each paragraph one clear focus, order supporting details logically, and make pronoun references explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “different cultures,” “concerts,” “audience,” “international level,” and “reduce stress.” This gives you enough basic language to communicate your main position. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or repetitive, which sometimes makes the meaning less clear. For example, “music is not just an art, its beyond the world” does not express a precise idea, and “demands our singer at global level” is difficult to interpret. There are also spelling errors such as “beyound,” “counrty,” and “freshed.” Build a more precise set of phrases for describing shared experiences and cultural exchange, and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, and the response includes some subordinate clauses, such as “when we are listening a music.” However, complex attempts are often faulty, and errors occur frequently enough to make parts of the argument difficult to follow. Examples include “everyone has relate with music,” “Every cultures feels,” and “music play very important role,” which show problems with verb forms, subject–verb agreement, and articles. Sentence boundaries and punctuation also need attention: “I strongly agree with this opinion, everyone…” joins two independent clauses with a comma. Practise accurate basic sentence patterns first, then extend them with conjunctions such as “because” and “while.” Proofread each sentence for a clear subject, correctly formed verb, and complete structure.

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