Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
As shown in figure, we have two diagram as a same park. The first picture shows the 1920 design of public park. On the other hand, the picture shows the modern design park.
The name of the park is Grange in arnold avenue. The seats are in the corner of the park and rose garden in front of seats. Fountain are present in the center of the park. After that entrance in the south and near the greenhouse. Stage for musicians are center between the rose garden. Moreover, there are two gates of entrance in the park.
On the other hand, the modern park different to 1920 park. In this park children play ground are present in the corner. and waterfall are in front of play area. Rose garden are middle in the park. Moreover, there are two entrance one is on north and other one is south. Cafe is near the entrance and children play area. In west amphitheatre for concerts are place.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
You identify the two time periods and report several relevant changes, including the children’s play area replacing the pond, the central rose garden, and the amphitheatre in the west. However, the response only partially summarises the plans: it has no clear overview of the park’s main transformation, and several details are inaccurate or unclear. For example, the 1920 stage was west of the fountain, not “center between the rose garden,” and the modern plan shows a water feature, not a waterfall. The café’s position and the underground car-park entrance are also omitted. To strengthen the response, give a concise overview first, then compare the most significant changes and accurately locate the features.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response has a basic, understandable structure: it introduces the two plans, describes the earlier park, and then moves to the present-day layout. Phrases such as “On the other hand” help signal the comparison. However, the progression within the paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow, and the repeated contrast marker does not always show a precise relationship between details. For instance, “After that entrance in the south” is unclear, while the modern-plan paragraph shifts abruptly from the play area to the water feature and then to the rose garden. Organise each description by location or by major changes, and use clearer links such as “in the north-east” and “by contrast” to guide the reader.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
You use some relevant vocabulary for describing a park, including “fountain,” “rose garden,” “entrance,” and “amphitheatre for concerts.” This gives the reader a basic sense of the features shown. However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or imprecise: “waterfall” does not match the labelled water feature, and “greenhouse” is not the same label as “glasshouse.” Phrases such as “modern design park” and “in front of seats” are also unnatural or unclear in this context. Build a more precise set of map-description terms, especially for location and change, and use the labels shown in the plans. This will make comparisons clearer without relying on repeated general words such as “park” and “present.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
Most sentences are short and follow a simple subject–verb pattern, so the basic meaning can usually be understood. There is an attempt to connect ideas with “On the other hand” and “Moreover,” but the range of sentence structures remains limited, and errors occur frequently. Examples include “we have two diagram,” “Fountain are present,” and “children play ground are present,” where number agreement and plural forms are not controlled. The fragment beginning “and waterfall” also needs to be joined to a complete sentence, and articles are often missing, as in “in the corner of the park.” Practise accurate simple sentences first, then combine related locations using clauses such as “which replaced the pond.”
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