Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

the pictorial presentation provides information about differance between same park when it first opened in 1920 and today. Name of the park is Grange park. Transformation is shown in today's view.

Overall in micro view in 1920 , a fountain, a rose gardens , a pond for water plants, a glasshouse ,a seats for visitors were there in garden . In todays image a cafe ,a playing area for children , a rose gardens , a water feature , and a amphitheatre for concert can be seen .

To begin with the park has entry from two sides since 1920 , one from the arnold avenue and another from the eldon street . In 1920 center of park had one fountain it is replaced by the rose garden .In the left to entrance it was a rose garden , instead of itbit is developed into cafe , and besides it there was a pond for water plants and today instead of it there is a playing area for children.

In , 1920 there was a little stage for musicians , today it transformed into huge a amphitheatre for concerts. Seats for visitors were very misplaced in 1920 , today it is properly aranged around rose garden . In, addition an underground parking for vehicles also included in modern park.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the park and give a useful overview of the main changes, including the replacement of the central fountain by a rose garden, the new café and children’s play area, and the amphitheatre. You also compare the park’s two entrances and mention the underground car park, so the response addresses the task and its key features. Some details, however, are unclear or inaccurate: the café replaces the northern rose garden, not a garden “left to entrance,” and the north-west rose garden remains unchanged. The seating change is also described as being “properly arranged” without clearly stating that seats now surround the central garden. More precise location comparisons and a clearer account of what stayed the same would complete the overview more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and two paragraphs describing the entrances and changes to park features. This gives the reader a coherent overall route through the information. However, progression within the detail paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow, particularly in “In the left to entrance it was a rose garden, instead of itbit is developed into cafe,” where the location and comparison are unclear. Linking phrases such as “To begin with” and “In addition” help, but some transitions are mechanical or incorrectly punctuated. Grouping changes by area—for example, northern features, central features, and western or southern features—and using clear references such as “this area” would make the comparisons easier to track.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant map vocabulary, including “fountain,” “pond for water plants,” “glasshouse,” “amphitheatre,” and “underground parking,” which allows you to report several important features. There are also attempts at more descriptive language, such as “transformed” and “replaced.” However, word choice and spelling errors are noticeable: “differance,” “aranged,” “misplaced,” and “micro view” are unsuitable or inaccurate in this context. Some phrases are also awkward, including “a playing area for children” and “a rose gardens.” Choose standard map-description terms and check spelling and collocations. For example, “children’s play area” and “seating is now arranged around the rose garden” would be clearer and more natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer comparisons, including “In 1920 center of park had one fountain it is replaced by the rose garden.” This shows an effort to describe change, but sentence boundaries and clause structure are often faulty, and several sentences contain errors in articles, agreement, or tense. For instance, “a rose gardens” mixes a singular article with a plural noun, while “today it transformed” needs a suitable passive form, such as “it has been transformed.” The sentence beginning “In the left to entrance” also lacks a clear grammatical structure. Use full stops or conjunctions to separate ideas, and practise consistent past-versus-present forms when comparing the two plans.

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