Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Grand Park was first time open in 1920 for public. At that time, it has seats for the public on the right side of the Eldon Street entrance, left side of the Arnold Avenue and two seating areas at the two left corners and one is at right side. A fountain is prasent in the center of the park. On the bignning it has three Rose gardens, a stage for musicians, apound for water plants and a glasshouse.

But, today stracture of the park has many inovations. The two main entrances are same and a new entrance for under ground car parking. A cafe is open at the Arnold Avenue entrance

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify the park’s opening year and mention several relevant features, including the central fountain, rose gardens, musicians’ stage, pond and glasshouse. However, the response only partially summarises the plans: it gives little information about how the park has changed, and the present-day description stops after mentioning the café and underground car-park entrance. Important changes such as the amphitheatre, children’s play area, central rose garden and water feature are omitted, and there is no clear overview of the main transformation. Some seating locations are also described unclearly. The response is 111 words, below the required 150. To improve, provide a concise overview and compare the main features in both plans, using accurate locations.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic chronological structure: it first describes the park in 1920 and then shifts to the present with “But, today”. This gives the reader a simple way to follow the time change, and the ideas are generally grouped by period. However, the second paragraph is very short and ends before the present-day features are fully described, so the comparison lacks progression. The opening list of seating locations is difficult to follow, particularly “on the right side of the Eldon Street entrance, left side of the Arnold Avenue”. Use clearer location-based grouping and linking phrases such as “In contrast” or “Meanwhile”, and organise the response into a complete past description, an overview of changes, and a present-day description.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “fountain”, “Rose gardens”, “stage for musicians” and “glasshouse”, so the reader can recognise several map features. However, the range is limited, and spelling errors such as “prasent”, “bignning”, “stracture”, “inovations” and “apound” make the writing less clear. Some expressions are also imprecise: “many innovations” is not a natural way to describe changes to a park plan, while “a cafe is open” does not clearly convey its location or that it is a new feature. Build a more accurate set of map-description terms, such as “located”, “replaced”, “remains” and “was converted into”, and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You communicate some basic information using simple sentences, for example, “A fountain is prasent in the center of the park.” There is also an attempt to contrast the two time periods. However, grammatical control is inconsistent: “Grand Park was first time open in 1920 for public” has faulty word order and article use, and “At that time, it has seats” uses an unsuitable tense for a past description. The sentence beginning “On the bignning” also shifts awkwardly between past and present forms. Most structures are simple, with little variety in clauses. Practise past-tense descriptions and accurate sentence patterns, for example, “When the park opened in 1920, it contained…” and “Today, the fountain has been replaced by…”. Use full stops to separate complete ideas.

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