Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The Grange Park of Arnold Avenue which was built in 1920, has changed a lot till today. There was a fountain at the center of the park initially when it was built. But today there stands a rose garden and some seats around it. Previously there were three rose gardens when it was built. Another big change is, the stage for musicians has been converted to an amphitheater for concerts. An additional feature is that there was no cafe at that time. Now there's one cafe in the park where people can delight themselves. Grange Park had a big glasshouse at that time. But now for the visitors they changed that glasshouse to a water feature. Both Arnol Avenue entrance and Eldon Street entrance are kept the same as earlier; there's no change to that. The position of the seats have changed. Previously they were scattered around the park, but now they have been shifted to the center around the rose garden.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify several important changes, including the central fountain becoming a rose garden, the musicians’ stage becoming an amphitheatre, and the glasshouse being replaced by a water feature. You also note that the entrances remain. These details are generally relevant, but some features are missing or not fully reported: the children’s play area replaced the pond, the café occupies the site of a former rose garden, and the north-west rose garden remains. The statement that seats were “shifted to the center” is too broad, since seats are also shown elsewhere in the current plan. A clearer overview of the park’s main changes, followed by more precise comparisons of locations, would make the summary more complete and developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response follows a broadly understandable sequence, moving from the central feature to the western area, then to the café, glasshouse and entrances. Linking words such as “But,” “Another big change” and “Previously” help signal comparisons. However, the ideas are presented as one continuous paragraph, and the repeated short transitions make the progression somewhat mechanical. Some references are also unclear: “that time” and “they” in “they have been shifted” require the reader to infer the intended reference. Organise the response into a brief overview and a paragraph comparing the main changes, and use clearer links between locations and their former uses.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for describing the plans, including “fountain,” “rose garden,” “amphitheater,” “glasshouse” and “water feature.” These terms make the main changes understandable. Some choices are informal or imprecise for an academic map summary: “changed a lot,” “big glasshouse,” and “people can delight themselves” do not describe the layout as precisely as the task requires. “Scattered around the park” also oversimplifies the specific seating locations. Aim for more neutral, location-focused language, such as describing a feature as being “replaced by” another or “located in the north-east corner.” Check spelling of proper names, including “Arnold.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple sentences and some more complex forms, including “where people can delight themselves” and the contrast introduced by “But.” Most of the meaning remains clear, although some grammatical errors and awkward constructions reduce accuracy. For example, “The Grange Park of Arnold Avenue which was built in 1920, has changed” has an unclear relative clause and misplaced comma; the park is not described as being built on the avenue. “The position of the seats have changed” has a subject–verb agreement error, and “Both … entrance … are kept” needs plural agreement for “entrances.” Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, articles and relative clauses, and use consistent past-versus-present forms when comparing the plans.

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