Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The plans compares grange park's stucture when it first opened and same park current day.

Overall, every facilities has redeveloped in the park, However The enterances remain at the same point as earlier.

In 1920, the grange park had two enterances, north side near arnold avenue, eldon street on the south. There was a grasshouse right after passing the south gate, seats were available following that. On the left side, seats were estabished for visitors who visited rose garden and more seats were available next after that, that was followed by the opposite side near north entrance, a stage for museum for musicians was middle of that. Fountain was established in the middle of

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response identifies the park’s two entrances as unchanged and begins to describe some 1920 features, so it shows a relevant understanding of the task. However, it is incomplete: it stops mid-sentence at “Fountain was established in the middle of” and gives no account of the park today, despite the task requiring a comparison of both plans. Several details are also unclear or inaccurate, such as calling the glasshouse a “grasshouse” and describing a “stage for museum for musicians.” The overview that “every facilities has redeveloped” conflicts with the unchanged entrances and the north-west rose garden. The response is also 36 words below the required minimum. To improve, complete the comparison, select the major changes, and support a clear overview with accurate locations.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening statement and overview are followed by a paragraph beginning “In 1920,” with details arranged by location. This gives the reader some sense of the intended progression. However, the response ends abruptly, so there is no completed comparison or concluding development, and the sequence of features is difficult to follow in places. Phrases such as “following that,” “next after that,” and “that was followed by” are repetitive and do not make the spatial relationships clear. The sentence about the stage also becomes confusing before the final unfinished sentence. Use separate paragraphs for the overview, the 1920 plan, and the present-day plan, and use precise location links such as “to the east” or “in the north-east corner.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some task-relevant vocabulary, including “entrances,” “rose garden,” “seats,” and “fountain,” and attempts to describe locations and changes. However, the range is limited, and several spelling or word-choice problems make parts difficult to interpret: “stucture,” “enterances,” “grasshouse,” and “estabished.” Some expressions are also unnatural or imprecise, notably “stage for museum for musicians” and “seats were available following that.” These issues fit a limited but minimally adequate range: the reader can identify some features, but not always the intended meaning. Build a reliable set of map vocabulary and check spelling; use concise phrases such as “a glasshouse stood near the southern entrance” and “seating was provided along the western edge.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts both simple statements and longer sentences, for example, “Overall, every facilities has redeveloped in the park, However The enterances remain at the same point as earlier.” However, control is inconsistent. Subject–verb agreement is faulty in “The plans compares” and “every facilities has,” while “when it first opened and same park current day” lacks the grammatical structure needed to express the comparison. The sentence beginning “There was a grasshouse…” contains unclear clause relationships, and the final sentence is incomplete. Capitalisation and punctuation are also unreliable, particularly the capitalised “However” after a comma. Practise accurate present and past descriptions, agreement, articles, and complete sentence boundaries. Short, controlled sentences would help before attempting more complex comparisons.

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