Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

THESE TWO MAPS OF GRANGE PARK SHOWS THE COMPARISON OF STRUCTURAL PLAN IT HOLDS WHEN IT FIRST OPENED IN 1920 BY TODAY.

AS AN OVERVIEW, BOTH MAPS HAVE SAME 2 ENTRANCES. ONE FROM ARNOLD STREET AND OTHER FROM ELDON STREET . BACK IN 1920 MOST OF THE PARK AREA WAS COVERED BY SEATS AT DIFFERENT CORNERS. SITTING AREA HAS BEEN REBUILT IN CENTER OF PARK.SPACE ALLOCATED BY GLASS HOUSE HAS BEEN GIVEN TO WATER FEATURE.

GRANGE PARK USED TO HAVE POND FOR WATERPLANTS WHEREAS CHILDREN PLAY AREA HAS BEEN BUILT ON THAT LOCATION.

AS THE RESULT OF RENOVATION AMPHITHEATRE HAS BEEN CONSTRUCTED ON LEFT OF THE PARK AFTER REMOVAL OF MUSIC STAGE. A CAFE HAS BEEN ADDED TO THE RIGHT TOP OF PARK AND ROSE GARDEN HAS BEN SHIFTED TO CENTER OF PARK WHICH IS COVERED BY NEWLY BUILT SITTING SPACE. AN UNDERGROUND CAR PARKING HAS BEEN ADDED TO NEW PLAN AND ITS ENTERANCE IS ON RIGHT OF ELDON STREET AND WATER FEATURE.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify several important changes, including the replacement of the pond by a children’s play area, the new amphitheatre in the western part, and the water feature in the former glasshouse area. The overview also notes that the entrances remain and that the park has been renovated. This covers the main transformation, and the location comparisons are generally grounded in the plans. However, some details are unclear or inaccurate: the central rose garden has not been shifted there; it replaces the fountain, while the original north-west rose garden remains. The café is east of the northern entrance, but “right top” is imprecise. The response also gives limited attention to the retained north-west garden and the seating arrangement. More precise coverage of these features would make the summary more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has an identifiable overview followed by further descriptions of changes, and the sequence from the pond and glasshouse to the western area and central garden gives the reader a broad sense of the redevelopment. Linking expressions such as “whereas,” “after,” and “as the result” help connect comparisons. However, the organisation is weakened by placing several distinct changes in one long final sentence, while the overview repeats information later rather than establishing a clear structure for the details. Some references are also difficult to follow, particularly “its entrance” and “which is covered by newly built sitting space.” Use separate paragraphs for the overview and grouped location-based changes, and make each reference explicit to improve progression and cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a reasonable range of map-related vocabulary, including “entrances,” “pond,” “amphitheatre,” “water feature,” and “underground car park,” and terms such as “replaced” and “constructed” help describe change. Meaning is generally recoverable, but several choices are imprecise or unnatural: “structural plan it holds,” “sitting area,” and “right top of park” do not express the intended information clearly. There are also spelling errors in “waterplants,” “ben,” and “enterance,” and “car parking” is less natural here than “car park.” Aim for precise location language and standard collocations, such as “in the north-east corner” and “seating area.” This would make the description more fluent and exact.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mix of simple statements and more complex comparisons, for example, “Grange Park used to have a pond … whereas [a] children’s play area has been built on that location.” These structures communicate several changes, but errors in agreement, articles, tense, and sentence construction remain. The opening says “These two maps … shows,” where the plural subject requires “show”; “both maps have same 2 entrances” needs an article and more natural number expression. In “rose garden has ben shifted,” the verb form is faulty, and the long final sentence joins several ideas without clear grammatical boundaries. Check subject–verb agreement and articles, and divide compound descriptions into shorter, controlled sentences while retaining some complex comparisons.

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