Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The plan illustrates how grange park was in 1920 and how it is today.

At the left side of the entrance, there was a rose garden back then which is replaced by the cafe now. Right now the park has children's play area which was missing in 1920.

One of the most noticable thing is the change of "stage for musicians". Right now there is a "Amphitheatre for concerts".

In 1920, there was no parking facilities which is available in underground now, they entrance is right around the water feature. And one of the other noticiable changes is the fountain that replaced by a big rose garden which has seats around it. The park used to has more rose garden than nowadays it has. Also the seats were around the corner of the stage. Although some things are missing in today's grange park which are ponds and the glasshouse but there is a new water feature available. The good thing is it has now a separate children's playing area.

There are lots of changes in today's grange park than 1920's grange park.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify several important changes, including the replacement of the central fountain by a rose garden with surrounding seats, the new concert amphitheatre, and the addition of a children’s play area and underground car-park entrance. These details are generally relevant and match the plans. However, the response does not give a clear overview of the park’s main transformation, and some comparisons are unclear or inaccurate: the café is east of the northern entrance, not “at the left side,” and the car-park entrance is indicated at the south-east corner rather than “right around” the water feature. The statement that the park has fewer rose gardens is also not supported: two are shown today, compared with three in 1920. Develop the overview and describe locations more precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response groups several changes together and uses basic linking expressions such as “Also” and “Although,” so the reader can follow the general topic. However, there is no clear progression from an overview to organised comparisons, and the ideas move abruptly between locations and features. For example, the paragraph shifts from the amphitheatre to parking, the central garden, seating, and then missing facilities without a consistent spatial or chronological order. Repeated openings such as “Right now” and “one of the other noticeable changes” also make the organisation feel list-like. Use separate paragraphs for an overview and for the main changes, then group details by area or by what was replaced.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a relevant range of park-related vocabulary, including “rose garden,” “fountain,” “glasshouse,” “underground,” and “Amphitheatre for concerts.” This is adequate for describing the plans, and the main meaning is usually clear. Some word choices and collocations are imprecise, however: “parking facilities” is less exact than “underground car park,” while “children’s playing area” would be more naturally expressed as “children’s play area.” There are also spelling errors in “noticable” and “noticiable,” and “back then” is informal for this report. Aim for precise map vocabulary and consistent formal phrasing, such as “in 1920” and “today,” while checking spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, including a contrast with “Although,” and the reader can generally understand the comparisons. Some grammatical errors remain, particularly in verb forms, articles, and sentence construction. For example, “the fountain that replaced by a big rose garden” needs a passive form (“the fountain was replaced”), and “The park used to has” should be “used to have.” In “they entrance,” the pronoun is incorrect, and “there was no parking facilities” has a number-agreement problem. The sentence beginning “Although some things are missing” is also not a complete independent sentence as written. Practise accurate past and present forms and check each sentence for a complete clause.

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