Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given diagrams illustrates the plan of public park that is opened in 1920,and also demonstrates it after the construction and how look like today.

Overall,the seats banch totally replaced in different places,in the first plan the seats are placed in the four edges of the area,while it changes totally after the construction the seats are placed in front of entrance door.Moreover the green house also remove gunuiely.Like that, another section also added in new plan is under ground car park.

In 1920, the plan of grange park is totally change and reconstructed.the both entrance is placed at same place in both of plan,while the things changes into second plan is seats is replaced another place,and after the contruction it is placed in front of arnold avenue entrance.Furthermore, the three rose garden in first plan also shrink and the two is totally remove after the construction and one is placed at same at the left top of the entrance.addtionally,the area also add in new plan is entrance of underground car park.Following this,the pond of water plants is replaced with the children play area which is loacted far right top side of entrance.After that, the cafe area is also be part of new plan,while in the older construction it is rose garden area.the fountine also replaced in new plan with rose garden and it covers with seats.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify several important changes, including the replacement of the pond by a children’s play area, the café taking the place of a rose garden, and the central fountain becoming a rose garden surrounded by seats. You also note that the entrances remain in the same positions. These details show that you address the main comparison, but the overview is unclear and includes inaccurate claims: seats were not simply moved to the entrances, and the north-west and northern rose gardens did not both disappear. The amphitheatre, a major change in the western area, is omitted. Develop the overview around the park’s main transformations, then describe the locations accurately and distinguish what remained from what was replaced.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an opening, an attempted overview and a body paragraph, so there is some organisation. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the overview and later details repeat points, and the account moves between features without a clear spatial or comparative order. For example, seats and the underground car park are mentioned in the overview and then revisited, while “Following this” and “After that” do not always signal a meaningful relationship between changes. Organise the body by area—north, centre and west/south—or group replacements together. Use clear references such as “the former pond” and “the central fountain” so readers can track each feature.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “rose garden,” “pond,” “entrance,” “replaced” and “underground car park,” which helps communicate the map changes. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or unclear, such as “seats banch,” “remove gunuiely,” “shrink,” and “the things changes.” Spelling errors such as “fountine” and “loacted” also make parts of the description harder to read. Aim for precise location and change vocabulary, and check spelling carefully. For example, describe a feature as “located in the north-east corner” or say it “was replaced by” another feature rather than using vague wording.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt longer sentences with contrast, using forms such as “while” and “Moreover,” but control is inconsistent, and errors sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to understand. Examples include “The given diagrams illustrates,” “the plan … is totally change,” and “the three rose garden … the two is totally remove,” which show problems with agreement, tense, plurals and verb forms. Articles and sentence boundaries also need attention, as in “plan of public park that is opened in 1920,and also demonstrates it after the construction.” Use the past simple for the 1920 plan and present simple for today, and check each sentence for a clear subject and correctly formed verb. Shorter, accurate comparisons will improve clarity.

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