Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

There are two pictures which represents a public park opened in 1920 and same park now .Overall there is lots of things that rebuild with better shape and some things removed .

The first picture depicts about the old park and their overall theme like seats, pond for water ,rose garden and many more but now many things changed.The entrance of park remain the same ,the fountain is removed from the park and at that place a gose garding is build with seats around it .The rose garden is at the left side and seats are all over the park they get into proper position next in pace of glass house a water feature is construct after that the stage for musicians is demolished and a Amphitheatre for concerts build in place of pnd a childrens play area is built and along with it a cafe is also made and a special entrence is made for underground car park at the side of water feature

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main change in the park’s centre: the fountain is replaced by a rose garden with seats around it, and you report several other conversions, including the pond becoming a children’s play area and the glasshouse becoming a water feature. These are relevant comparisons and show that you understand the overall transformation. However, the overview is vague (“lots of things that rebuild”) and does not clearly summarise the park’s main pattern of change. Some details are unclear or incomplete: the café is not explicitly located on the northern edge, and the north-west rose garden remains unchanged. Make the overview more precise, then describe the key changes by area so that the reader can compare the two plans more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic overall sequence: it introduces the two plans, gives a general overview, and then describes several changes. Words such as “but now,” “after that,” and “in place of” help signal contrast or replacement. However, most of the information is packed into one long paragraph, and the sequence of locations is difficult to follow. The repeated use of “and” and “after that” makes the connections feel mechanical, while references such as “at that place” and “along with it” are not always precise. Use separate paragraphs for the overview and details, and group comparisons by location—for example, the northern area, centre, and southern or western areas—to create clearer progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing plans, including “entrance,” “fountain,” “rose garden,” “water feature,” and “amphitheatre for concerts.” Phrases such as “removed from the park” and “build in place of” also attempt to express change. However, several word choices and spelling errors reduce precision, including “gose garding,” “pnd,” “glass house,” and “entrence.” Some expressions are vague or unnatural, such as “lots of things that rebuild with better shape” and “seats are all over the park.” Aim for accurate map vocabulary and collocations, such as “was replaced by,” “is located in the north-east corner,” and “seating surrounds the garden.” Proofreading spelling will make your comparisons easier to understand.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, and the reader can generally understand the changes you describe. However, control of sentence structure and verb forms is uneven. For example, “There are two pictures which represents” has a subject–verb agreement error, while “a gose garding is build” and “a Amphitheatre … build” show problems with articles and passive verb forms. The long sentence beginning “The entrance of park remain the same” joins many separate ideas without clear punctuation, making the relationships harder to follow. Use accurate passive forms such as “was replaced by” and “was built,” check singular and plural agreement, and divide long sequences into shorter sentences. These changes would improve accuracy while allowing you to retain some complex structures.

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