Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

GRANGE PARK WAS ESTABLISHED IN 1920 IN THE AVENUE ARONLD. IN THESE GRANGE PARK THEY HAVE STAGE FOR MUSICIANS , FOUNTAIN, ROSE GARDEN, POND FOR WATER PLANTS , GLASSHOUSE AND THERE ARE SOME SEATS TO SIT FOR PEOPLE CAN ENJOY THE EVENGING WITH THEIR FRIENDS.

IN TODAY THE ARNOLD PARK THERE IS A CAFE AND WE CAN ENJOY THE COFFE OR TEA AND THERE IS TWO ROSE GARDENS ONE NORMAL GARDEN . AND ANOTHER ONE ROSE GARDEN IS SURRONDED BY THE SEATS TO SIT. IN THE ENTRANCE UNDERGROUND CAR PARK THERE IS WATER FEATURE AND PEOPLES CAN ENJOY TO SEEING FISHES IN WATER FEATURE.

AND THERE IS ACHILDRENS PLAY AREA WHERE CHILDRENS CAN COME AND ENJOY IN THE EVINING AFTER THE COMPLETITION OF THEIR SCHOOL. IN THE PARK OF CHILDRENS AREA THERE ARE MANY PLAYING KITS ARE THERE FOR CHILDRENS.

AND IN THE PARK THERE IS A AMPHITHEATRE FOR DOING THE PROGRAMS AND SOME OTHER FUNCTIONS.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify several relevant features, including the stage, fountain, rose gardens, pond and glasshouse in the earlier plan, and the café, play area, central garden and amphitheatre today. However, the response mainly lists facilities and adds unsupported details, such as people seeing fish in the water feature and children using “many playing kits.” It does not clearly summarise the main changes or compare the two plans: for example, the pond became a play area, the glasshouse was replaced by a water feature, and the central fountain became a rose garden surrounded by seats. A concise overview of these major transformations, followed by accurate location-based comparisons, would make the report more complete and focused.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has some basic organisation: it begins with the 1920 park and then moves to the present-day layout, so the reader can recognise the two time periods. However, the ideas within each section are mostly presented as a list, and there is little clear progression from an overview to the most important comparisons. Repeated openings such as “IN TODAY,” “AND THERE IS,” and “IN THE PARK” make the writing repetitive, while connections between features are not explained. Grouping the information into an overview and two comparison-focused paragraphs, and using links such as “whereas,” “by contrast,” and “in the same location,” would make the organisation clearer.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant map vocabulary, including “fountain,” “pond for water plants,” “glasshouse,” “amphitheatre,” and “underground car park,” which helps identify the facilities. However, the range is limited and several expressions are inaccurate or informal for a map report. For example, “we can enjoy the coffe or tea” and “people can enjoy to seeing fishes” describe imagined activities rather than the plan, and “playing kits” is not a natural term for play equipment. Spelling errors such as “EVENGING,” “SURRONDED,” and “EVINING” are also noticeable. Use precise location and change vocabulary, such as “is situated,” “was replaced by,” and “occupies the north-east corner,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to connect ideas with longer sentences, but grammatical control is inconsistent and errors frequently make the descriptions difficult to follow. Examples include “there is two rose gardens,” “an another one rose garden,” and “there are many playing kits are there,” which show problems with agreement, articles, and sentence construction. Verb patterns are also faulty in “people can enjoy to seeing fishes,” and several sentences run together without effective punctuation. Most clauses follow a simple “there is/are” pattern, so the range is limited. Practise accurate simple descriptions first, then add controlled comparisons, for example, “The pond was replaced by a children’s play area,” and check subject–verb agreement and sentence boundaries.

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