Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The plans show the redevelopement happened in Grange Park from 1920 to till now.

Nowadays, the middle area of the park converted to the seating area with rose garden in between, before there was a fountain there. In 1920, rose garden was besides Arnold Avenue entrance, today that area is used as cafe, in front of the cafe there is a water features besides Eldon Street entrance, in 1920 it was use as glasshouse. Previously, besides glasshouse we had seats and pond for water plants, today this redevelopment into children's play area.

In 1920, seats placed right next to the entrances, but today these areas are free from these seats and they are moved to the center of the park. On the right side of Arnold Avenue, we have rose ga

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify several relevant changes, including the central fountain being replaced by a rose garden and the former glasshouse area becoming a water feature. However, the response is incomplete and does not provide a clear overview of the park’s main transformation. Some details are inaccurate or unclear: the central area is not simply a seating area, but a rose garden surrounded by seats, and the water feature is in the south-east corner rather than “in front of the cafe.” The amphitheatre and the café are also important changes that need clearer reporting. The response is 19 words below the required minimum, which limits the range of features you can cover. Add a concise overview and describe the main changes accurately and systematically.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is some organisation: the response begins with a general statement and then compares features in the park, using time markers such as “Nowadays,” “In 1920,” and “Previously.” These help the reader recognise that changes over time are being discussed. However, the ideas do not progress in a clear, complete sequence. The second paragraph moves between the centre, north and south without a consistent route, and the final sentence breaks off at “rose ga,” leaving the comparison unfinished. Some references, such as “that area” and “these areas,” are not sufficiently precise. Use separate paragraphs for an overview and grouped location-based comparisons, and complete each point before moving on.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing a map, including “redevelopment,” “entrances,” “rose garden,” “fountain,” and “children’s play area.” This gives you a workable range for the task, and the reader can generally identify the features you mean. However, several choices or forms are inaccurate or awkward, such as “redevelopement,” “water features,” and “free from these seats.” The phrase “converted to the seating area” is also imprecise for a rose garden surrounded by seats. Aim for more exact map-description collocations and check spelling and singular/plural forms. More precise vocabulary would help distinguish what was removed, retained, and newly introduced.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, and comparisons across past and present are generally understandable. However, errors occur frequently enough to make some relationships difficult to follow. For example, “The plans show the redevelopement happened” needs a clearer clause structure, while “from 1920 to till now” uses an incorrect time expression. There are also problems with articles and verb forms in “the middle area … converted” and “it was use as glasshouse.” Sentence boundaries and punctuation are sometimes weak, particularly in the long sequence beginning “In 1920, rose garden…”. Practise accurate past and present passive forms, and divide long comparisons into shorter, complete sentences.

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