Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The plans illtustrates the pubilc park in the 1920 and the same park today and show what changed happend in this time.

Grange park in 1920 two main entrance of the park one from Arnold Avenue and other form Eldon Street entrance right side glasshouse with the right side wall some seats. Left side of the entrance some seats after seats a rose garden some seats with left wall upar side of the rose garden is a stage for musicians. Arnold Avenue entrance right side same to eldon street left side entrance left side the arnold avenue entrance was rose garden in the corner pond for water plants and in the middel of the hole park a fountain.

Today park have two main entrance one is arnold avenue and other is eldon street in the middel of the park a rose garden and around the garden seats left side the eldon street entrance a amphitheatre for concerts and right side of the entrance is water feature

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the two entrances and several key features, including the central fountain in 1920 and the central rose garden today, so the response is relevant to the plans. However, the comparison is only partial and some locations are unclear or inaccurate: for example, the amphitheatre is described as being by the Eldon Street entrance, although it occupies the western area, and the café and children’s play area are omitted. There is no clear overview summarising the main changes, such as the replacement of several older features and the addition of new recreational facilities. To strengthen the response, give a concise overview first, then compare the park’s main areas systematically and report the important changes accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic chronological structure: it describes the 1920 plan first and then turns to the present with “Today park…”. This gives the reader some sense of the two time periods. However, the first description is a long, difficult-to-follow sequence, and relationships between features are often unclear, as in “Left side of the entrance some seats after seats a rose garden”. The second paragraph is also brief and does not develop a clear comparison between the plans. Use separate, clearly organised paragraphs for an overview and the two layouts, and group details by area—for example, north, centre and south. More accurate linking phrases such as “whereas”, “in contrast” and “has been replaced by” would make the progression easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant map vocabulary, including “entrance”, “rose garden”, “fountain”, “glasshouse” and “amphitheatre for concerts”, which helps convey the subject. However, the range is limited and several phrases are repetitive or imprecise, such as “some seats” and “right side of the entrance”. Spelling errors—including “illtustrates”, “pubilc” and “middel”—also make the description less clear. Aim for more precise location language and change vocabulary, such as “in the north-east corner”, “along the southern edge” and “was replaced by”. Check spelling carefully, and use accurate collocations such as “the park had two entrances” rather than “two main entrance of the park”.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response communicates some basic information through simple clauses, but grammatical control is inconsistent and sentence structures are very limited. Errors in agreement and verb forms appear in phrases such as “The plans illtustrates” and “Today park have”; articles and plurals are also missing in “two main entrance” and “a amphitheatre”. Several ideas are joined without clear sentence boundaries, particularly in the long description of the 1920 layout, which makes relationships between features difficult to understand. Practise writing complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and use past tense for the 1920 plan and present tense for today. Add punctuation to separate locations and use articles and plural forms consistently.

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