Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The provided diagrams depict the plan of public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

In 1920, Funtain was placed in the centre of park right after the entrance on both sides. on the left side of fountain, a stage for musician and there was a pond for water plants in one corner of park. there was a glasshouse on the right of ELDON street entrance and there was rose garden on both sides of ARNOLD AVENUE's entrance.

nowadays, park are more modernise then before, there is a cafe on the right side of arnold avenue entrance and there is a children's play area right after the cafe. The rose garden is replaced with fountain. the stage of musician converted into the amphitheatre at same place. there is a underground car parking in the right corner of ELDON street entry point. there is a water feature on the right of entrance from ELDON street.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the two time periods and report several relevant changes, including the stage becoming an amphitheatre and the addition of a café, play area and underground car park. However, the response has no clear overview of the park’s main transformation, and some details are inaccurate or unclear: the central fountain is replaced by a rose garden, not the other way around, and the café and play area are separate features rather than one following the other. Several important changes are omitted, including the north-west rose garden remaining and the seating around the central garden. The response is also 4 words below the 150-word minimum; the 13 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. Add a concise overview and report the locations and changes more accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response follows a basic chronological order, first describing the 1920 plan and then the present-day park, which gives the reader a simple framework. However, it is presented as two large paragraphs with little internal organisation, and the sequence of details within each paragraph is sometimes difficult to follow. Repeated use of “there was” and “there is” makes the description feel list-like, while links such as “nowadays” and “the stage … converted” do not always make the relationships between features clear. Group the information by area or by major changes, and use clearer comparisons such as “whereas,” “in contrast,” and “has been replaced by” to create a more logical progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant map vocabulary, including “fountain,” “pond for water plants,” “glasshouse,” “amphitheatre,” and “water feature,” so the reader can recognise many of the facilities being described. There is some variety in how locations are expressed, for example “in the centre” and “in one corner.” However, several word choices and forms are inaccurate or awkward, such as “Funtain,” “modernise,” “car parking,” and “right after the cafe.” These reduce precision, particularly when describing changes. Aim for accurate collocations and consistent spelling, and use more exact location language such as “in the north-east corner” or “along the southern edge” rather than relying repeatedly on “right side.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response communicates its basic meaning through mostly simple sentence patterns, and it attempts to connect ideas with phrases such as “and there was” and “the stage … converted into.” However, the range of structures is limited, and errors occur frequently in articles, agreement, tense and sentence boundaries. Examples include “plan of public park,” “park are,” and “a underground car parking.” The sentence beginning “on the left side of fountain” is also a fragment, and several sentences begin with lowercase letters after full stops. Use complete sentences with consistent past tense for 1920 and present tense for today, and check articles and subject–verb agreement. More accurate complex comparisons would also help express the changes clearly.

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