Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-07-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The Grange park which was opened in 1920 between Arnold avenue and Eldon street. Several changes were made with time as of today. Other than the rose garden of the left side everything has been restructured.
The changes of today has done many improvements such as the seats all around the park we removed and were placed around the rose garden which was in the center of the park. There are two rose garden, the one in the center and the other which is on the top left side of the park. There are two entrances of the park, one is of Arnold avenue and the other is at the Eldon street. By improvising the stage of musicians, an amphitheatre for concerts is constructed.
On the top right corner a children's play area has been established by removing the pond for water plants. And the water feature has also replaced the glass house which was at the bottom right of the park. Beside the children's play area on the left there is a cafe which is also replaced in the place of the rose garden.
In conclusion, the park has been almost fully changed by the comparison of when it was opened in 1920.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers the main features of the park's transformation, such as the addition of the amphitheatre, children's play area, and the relocation of the rose gardens. However, the description is somewhat confusing and contains factual inaccuracies regarding the layout (e.g., mentioning two rose gardens when the map shows one original and one new one, or misidentifying the location of the cafe). While the main features are identified, the lack of clarity in describing the spatial relationships between 1920 and today limits the effectiveness of the report. To improve, ensure that the information extracted from the visual data is precise and clearly contrasted.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as the phrase 'The changes of today has done many improvements'. Referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult to track which specific area of the park is being discussed. The progression of ideas is occasionally disjointed, particularly when moving between the different features of the park. Improving the variety and accuracy of linking words and ensuring clear referencing would significantly enhance the flow of the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks the precision required for a higher band. There are instances of awkward word choices, such as 'improvising the stage' instead of 'converting' or 'developing', and 'replaced in the place of'. While the student manages to name the features (amphitheatre, pond, glass house), the range is limited and repetitive. To achieve a higher score, focus on using more precise verbs and collocations related to describing maps and changes, such as 'transformed', 'demolished', 'relocated', or 'replaced by'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('The changes... has done'), incorrect preposition usage ('on the left side' vs 'to the left'), and awkward phrasing ('by the comparison of'). Punctuation is generally functional, but the sentence structure often feels forced. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and refining the use of passive voice, which is essential for describing changes in maps or plans.
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