Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-07-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The above diagrams of grange oark shows about the difference between the decades from 1920s to till today that how it modified from time time.

The fisrt picture show that in 1920 the oark has a fountain in center and entrance 8n bothe east and west side.

On left sides rose garden on both sides of east with sitting area besides of garden and a stage of musicians.on right sidesa pond for giving water to plants as well as a rose garen near to it.there is glasshouse with west entrance.

Now in todays scene there is lot oof change in park.rose garden is in center with sitting seat all the sides.with east entrance on top right there is cafe and children play areaand at the bottom of west there is underground water features

On the east side top lesft there is rose gardern and amphitheater for concerts.

It shows with the passage of time modification has been made to make place more interesting and enjoye able for children's as well.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers the main features of the park in 1920 and today, identifying key changes such as the relocation of the rose garden and the addition of the cafe and play area. However, the description is somewhat disorganized and lacks a clear overview of the most significant changes. Some details are imprecise, such as the location of the rose garden and amphitheater, which makes it difficult for the reader to visualize the changes accurately. To improve, ensure you provide a clear summary statement in the introduction and group related features logically rather than listing them in a fragmented manner.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the internal structure is weak. The progression of ideas is often confusing, particularly when describing the layout of the park. Cohesive devices are used sparingly and sometimes incorrectly, such as the repetitive use of 'on left sides' and 'on right sides'. Referencing is often unclear, making it difficult to follow the spatial relationships between the features. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'in contrast', 'furthermore', 'subsequently') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus, such as one for the 1920 layout and one for the current layout.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, with several spelling errors such as 'oark' for park, 'fisrt' for first, and 'enjoye able' for enjoyable. The range of vocabulary is basic and lacks the precision required for describing maps or plans. Phrases like 'giving water to plants' are awkward and could be replaced with more academic terminology. To improve, focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary for describing changes, such as 'demolished', 'constructed', 'relocated', and 'transformed', and pay closer attention to spelling and word formation.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains frequent grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('diagrams... shows'), missing articles ('in center'), and incorrect preposition usage ('besides of garden'). Sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at more complex sentences are often marred by errors in punctuation and word order. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors requires the reader to work harder to interpret the intended message. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like missing articles and verb endings will significantly improve your score.

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