Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-07-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The given map depicts the various changes which took place a public park in the given period of 1920 and in the present. It is evident that all changes were made to make this place more organised.
To commence with, it is noticeable that first of all in the right side of northen rose garden and seats were located and in the left side of northern pond water plants and rose garden was situated in the 1920 but, after development in the right side of rose garden same and seats were removed and in the left side the cafe and children play area is situated. Moreover, in the edge of northern the entrance was located in the both side. However, in the mid area of park fountain and stage for musicians were built in th 1920 and then later on renovated the park changed in the rose garden and seats and stage for musicians were replaced in the amphitheater for concerts. Finally, in the right and left side of southern corner side rose garden, seats and glasshouse was stabled and after renovated the glasshouse is changed in the water feature and edge of the south side entance is located in both side.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers the main features of the park in 1920 and today, identifying key changes such as the replacement of the stage with an amphitheatre and the addition of a cafe. However, the description is somewhat confusing and lacks a clear overview of the most significant transformations. The reporting of spatial information is often imprecise, making it difficult for the reader to follow the layout changes. While the task is addressed, the lack of clarity in comparing the two maps prevents a higher score. To improve, focus on grouping features logically (e.g., northern vs. southern sections) and ensuring the overview highlights the most striking differences rather than just listing details.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The response uses some cohesive devices like 'To commence with' and 'Moreover', but these are often used mechanically or inappropriately. The paragraphing is weak; the body paragraph is overly long and dense, making it difficult to navigate the information. The progression of ideas is hindered by repetitive sentence structures and unclear referencing, such as 'in the right side of northen rose garden', which makes the spatial relationships hard to follow. Improving the use of paragraphing to separate distinct areas of the park and using a wider variety of linking words would significantly enhance the flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
The vocabulary is somewhat limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic terms like 'changes', 'side', and 'located'. There are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'glasshouse is stabled' and 'renovated the park changed in the rose garden'. These errors occasionally cause the reader to pause to decipher the intended meaning. To achieve a higher band, you should aim to use more precise vocabulary related to maps and urban planning, such as 'transformed', 'converted', 'situated', or 'replaced', and ensure that these terms are used in the correct context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Issues include incorrect preposition usage ('in the right side of'), missing articles, and tense inconsistencies. For example, 'in the mid area of park fountain and stage... were built' lacks necessary articles. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and punctuation limits the clarity of the writing. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles would help improve the accuracy of your sentences.
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