Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-07-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The diagram shows the plan of public garden of how it look when its open which was 1920 and how it look today.

Overall , there is change in plan of park , back before there was an fountain which was replace with the rose garden and also many amenities like instead of stage for musicians now there is amphitheatre for concerts and also there is place for children play area and a cafe also open .

So the park is in rectangular shape back before in 1920 , there was two entrance on south there was Eldon street and on north Arnold Avenue . From the south entrance on the righthand side there was a greenhouse and near to that there was a seat and on the left side there was a rose garden and beside both the side there was seat .In middle of garden there was a fountain and just left straight there was a stage for musicians .From the north gate on both side there was a rose garden and on left side just beside rose garden there was pond for water plants.

In current plan instead of fountain there is a rose garden and surround there is seating arrangment and instead of stage there is theatre for concerts and also from north gate on the left side there is cafe and children play area and also straight towards south gate there is water feature . Also there is and underground car park at the end of south left side.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers the main features of the park in 1920 and today, identifying key changes such as the replacement of the fountain and the addition of the cafe and car park. However, the report lacks a clear overview of the most significant changes, which is essential for a high band score. The description is somewhat repetitive and lacks a cohesive summary of the transformation. While the main features are identified, the comparison between the two time periods could be more analytical rather than just listing items. To improve, ensure you highlight the most striking differences in an introductory overview paragraph.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate (e.g., 'So the park is...', 'Also there is and...'). The progression of ideas is sometimes disjointed, particularly when moving between the 1920 description and the current layout. Paragraphing is present but the internal flow within paragraphs is weak. To improve, use a wider range of linking words such as 'consequently', 'furthermore', or 'in contrast' to connect sentences more naturally and improve the logical flow of the report.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'back before' instead of 'originally' or 'in the past', and 'seat' instead of 'seating areas'. The range of vocabulary is limited, relying on basic descriptors like 'place' or 'side'. To achieve a higher band, you should incorporate more precise terminology related to maps and urban planning, such as 'situated', 'replaced by', 'transformed', or 'adjacent to', and focus on using more accurate collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Issues include missing articles ('the' fountain), incorrect verb tenses ('how it look' instead of 'how it looked'), and subject-verb agreement errors ('there was two entrance'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing commas and incorrect spacing. While the meaning is generally clear, these persistent errors impede the fluency of the writing. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, consistent tense usage for past and present descriptions, and careful proofreading to eliminate minor slips.

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