Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-07-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The given layouts illustrate the changes in public park which is also know as Grange park in Arnold avenue city. The first diagram depicts the past years status of the grange park, while the second diagram shows the suggest changes that to be implemented.

In general the overall structure remain the same whereas the same new development in current status in the second map. Similarly, there's new faculties are there in current situation.

Overall, entrance of Eldon street remained same on north south side, pond for water plants on east side corner replaced by chalder's play area. Furthermore, past glasshouse replaced by water feature on the south side. However, stage for musicians also changed to amphitheaters for concerts respectively. In addition, in the middle of park fountain replaced by rose garden and surrounded by seats bench on all sides. Additionally, cafeteria also build in current development, rose garden shifted only west side.

By comparing given layouts, we can observed that the east side there was one new entrance underground car parking area built. Similarly, grange park presently has more facilities rather than past in 1920.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response covers the main features of the park's transformation, including the addition of the car park, the amphitheatre, and the relocation of the rose garden. However, the overview is somewhat weak and lacks a clear summary of the most significant changes. The description of the changes is occasionally confusing, such as the mention of 'underground car parking' which is not clearly depicted in the source image, and the phrasing 'suggest changes that to be implemented' is inaccurate as the task asks to compare the past with the present. While the main features are identified, the report would benefit from a more precise and analytical approach to the spatial changes.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or slightly awkward, such as the repetitive use of 'Similarly' and 'Additionally' at the start of sentences. The progression of ideas is sometimes disjointed, particularly in the third paragraph where the list of changes feels like a series of isolated points rather than a cohesive narrative. Referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult to track the specific locations of the changes being described. Improved use of linking phrases and better paragraph transitions would enhance the flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. There are several instances of awkward phrasing and word choice errors, such as 'past years status', 'new faculties are there', and 'cafeteria also build'. The term 'faculties' is incorrectly used to refer to park facilities. While the student attempts to describe specific features like 'amphitheatre' and 'rose garden', the overall range is limited. To reach a higher band, the student should focus on using more accurate collocations and avoiding repetitive, simplistic sentence starters.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include missing articles (e.g., 'in middle of park'), incorrect verb tenses (e.g., 'cafeteria also build'), and subject-verb agreement errors (e.g., 'overall structure remain'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for tense consistency would be highly beneficial.

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