Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-04
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The map illustrates a layout of Grange public park when it opened in 1920 and after development how it has changed in recent time.
Overall, there are various modern developments in Grange park. Some places have been demolished and several new regions have been introduced.
In 1920, there were two entrances near the Eldon street and Arnold avenue. In today, the entrances remained at the same place but added one more underground entrance for car park in the east side. On the right side of the corner, the glasshouse was removed and it has been replaced by water feature. There was plenty of rose gardens in 1920, but after constructing removed all the garden except one. Which has been besides, Arnold avenue.
In the middle, there was one fountain in 1920, which has been replaced by rose garden in the shape of square and around that added few seating area. In today, Introduced children's play area and café north side of the park. Removed all the seats and place it in a proper location. On the west side there was one stage for musicians but after developing it has been converted into Amphitheatre for concerts.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the park's development, including the addition of the underground car park, the replacement of the glasshouse, and the conversion of the stage into an amphitheatre. However, the overview is somewhat generic, and some descriptions lack precision, such as the vague mention of 'several new regions'. While the key changes are identified, the comparison between 1920 and the present could be more analytical. The report successfully highlights the transformation of the central area and the addition of modern amenities like the café and play area, meeting the requirements of the task.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs focusing on specific areas of the park. However, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical or awkward, such as 'In today' and 'Which has been besides'. The progression of ideas is generally clear, but the referencing is occasionally confusing, particularly when describing the movement of seats. Improved use of linking words and better sentence-level transitions would enhance the flow and logical connection between the historical and modern states of the park.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing the writer to describe the changes using terms like 'demolished', 'replaced', 'converted', and 'amphitheatre'. However, there are noticeable errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'In today' instead of 'Nowadays' or 'Currently', and 'after constructing removed all the garden'. These errors do not impede communication, but they limit the range of vocabulary to a basic level. To achieve a higher band, the student should focus on more precise collocations and avoid repetitive phrasing when describing the removal or addition of park features.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with prepositions and articles (e.g., 'near the Eldon street', 'on the west side there was one stage'). Some sentences are fragmented or grammatically incomplete, such as 'Which has been besides, Arnold avenue.' These errors are persistent but do not prevent the reader from understanding the intended message. To improve, the student should focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of definite and indefinite articles in descriptive writing.
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