Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-04
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The map illustrates a layout of Grange public park when it opened in 1920 and after development how it has changed in recent time.
Overall, there are various modern developments in Grange park. Some places have been demolished and several new regions have been introduced.
In 1920, there were two entrances near the Eldon street and Arnold avenue. In today, the entrances remained at the same place but one more underground entrance for car park in the east side. On the right side of the corner, the glasshouse was removed and it has been replaced by water feature. There was plenty of rose gardens in 1920, but after constructing removed all the garden except one. Which has been besides, Arnold avenue.
In the middle, there was one fountain in 1920, which has been replaced by rose garden in the shape of square and around that added few seating area. In today, Introduced children's play area and café north side of the park. Removed all the seats and place it in a proper location. On the west side there was one stage for musicians but after developing it has been converted into Amphitheatre for concerts.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response provides a clear overview of the changes between 1920 and the present day. You have successfully identified the key features, such as the removal of the glasshouse, the addition of the water feature, and the transformation of the stage into an amphitheatre. However, the report is slightly hindered by some inaccuracies in detail; for instance, you mention the rose gardens were removed except for one, but the map shows two remaining. Additionally, the description of the new underground car park entrance is a good observation, but the overall summary could be more precise in its spatial descriptions to ensure the reader can clearly visualise the layout changes.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is logically organised into paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs focusing on different areas of the park. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'In 1920' and 'In today' (though 'In today' is grammatically incorrect), to guide the reader. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and the use of referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the sentence 'Which has been besides, Arnold avenue,' which is a sentence fragment. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that sentences are complete would help the progression of ideas feel more natural.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'demolished', 'introduced', 'converted', and 'amphitheatre' appropriately. However, there are some noticeable errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'In today' instead of 'Today' or 'Currently', and 'after constructing removed all the garden' which is awkward phrasing. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise collocations and avoiding repetitive phrasing. The vocabulary is sufficient to convey the main points, but it lacks the sophistication and flexibility required for a higher score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you attempt to use complex sentences, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with prepositions and sentence construction. Examples include 'near the Eldon street' (should be 'near Eldon Street'), 'In today' (incorrect usage), and 'around that added few seating area' (missing subject and article). These errors are frequent but do not generally impede communication. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement, correct article usage, and ensuring that every sentence has a clear subject and verb.
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