Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The maps outlays the structure of a public park named Grange Park when it first opened in 1920 and today.

Overall, the park has been developed into a more entertaining place by replacing and expanding certain facilities like cafe, water feature and amphitheatre.

In past, the centre of the park was occupied by a huge water fountain which is now replaced by a rose garden surrounded by seating area. To it's west was a stage for musicians to perform. However, it is expanded and redeveloped into a huge amphitheatre for concerts.

A new water feature has been built just east to the southern entrance where used to exist a glasshouse. The pond for water plants is removed to add a play arena for children. Also the northern entrance welcomes the people with a cafe to its east in place of rose garden. The two main gates remained the same with it's opening into arnold avenue and eldon street along with a new way from underground car parking near the new water facility.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have successfully identified the main features of the park in 1920 and today, providing a clear overview and comparing the changes effectively. You covered the key developments, such as the replacement of the fountain with a rose garden and the expansion of the stage into an amphitheatre. To improve, ensure you provide more precise spatial descriptions. For instance, instead of saying 'to its west', specify the location relative to the park's layout. Additionally, ensure all labels are accurately reflected; for example, the 'rose garden' is now in the north, not the east. Overall, you have provided a solid summary that addresses the requirements of the task well.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is logically organized, with a clear introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs that group information by theme or location. You use cohesive devices such as 'however', 'also', and 'in place of' to connect ideas. However, the flow could be improved by using more varied linking phrases to avoid a slightly mechanical feel. Some referencing is slightly unclear, such as 'to its west', where the antecedent is not immediately obvious. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the overview from the detailed descriptions, which helps the reader follow the progression of changes from 1920 to the present day.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'redeveloped', 'amphitheatre', and 'occupied'. There are some minor inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'maps outlays' (should be 'maps outline') and 'welcomes the people with a cafe' (which is slightly unnatural). While you successfully describe the changes, using more precise collocations would elevate your score. For example, instead of 'huge water fountain', you could use 'central water feature'. The vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning clearly, but expanding your range of descriptive adjectives and verbs would help you reach a higher band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While your meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors that occur throughout the text. Examples include 'The maps outlays' (subject-verb agreement), 'In past' (missing article 'the'), 'To it's west' (incorrect use of possessive 'its'), and 'where used to exist a glasshouse' (awkward word order). These errors do not impede communication, but they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles will significantly improve the accuracy of your writing.

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