Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-06
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The maps describes that how public park when it first opened in 1920 and now the same park today.
Overall, there are so many changes are done in park many modern changes are apply for looking stunning and attractive. The major change is on the north and south side of the park and there are no change in the entrance of the park.
To begin with, there was three rose garden in the north and south side was demolish and only one rose garden is present today. Furthermore, the fountain in the center of the park was replace with large rose garden and seats are arrange on all four side. Moreover, the stage for musicians was replace with the amphitheater for concerts on the west side of the park.
Besides this, the rose garden on the top of the park were replaced in the café and besides this pound for water plants was demolish and children's play area are constructed. Apart from this, on the down side of the park glasshouse was removed and beautiful water feature are invented also another entrance underground car park is open.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the maps, such as the removal of the glasshouse and the addition of the amphitheater. However, the description is somewhat superficial and lacks a clear overview of the most significant trends, such as the shift from a more natural, garden-focused layout to a more facility-oriented park. While the main features are identified, the comparison between 1920 and today is occasionally imprecise, and some details are slightly inaccurate (e.g., the claim that there are no changes to the entrance). The response addresses the task requirements but lacks the analytical depth required for a higher band.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as the repetitive use of 'besides this' and 'apart from this'. The progression of ideas is sometimes disjointed, particularly in the final paragraph where multiple changes are listed without clear logical flow. Referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult to track which specific area of the park is being discussed. Improved use of linking words and better paragraph transitions would enhance the overall flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. There is a reliance on basic verbs like 'replace', 'remove', and 'construct'. Some word choices are unnatural or incorrect, such as 'invented' when referring to a water feature, or 'on the down side' to describe the southern part of the park. While the meaning is generally clear, the range of vocabulary is limited, and there is little evidence of less common lexical items or sophisticated collocations that would demonstrate a higher level of language control.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede readability. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The maps describes', 'there was three rose garden', 'children's play area are constructed') and tense usage. The sentence structures are predominantly simple, with limited attempts at complex sentences. When complex structures are attempted, they often contain errors, such as the opening sentence which lacks a clear main clause. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas. A greater focus on basic grammatical accuracy is necessary before moving toward more complex structures.
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