Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-08
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The pictorial representation illustrates about the changes between public park of 1920 and the similar part in present.
In an overview, there can be seen many changes for example new fountain added, amphitheatre for concerts , latest water feature introduce and rose garden made for public.
At the outset, it can be observe that in front of entrance where fountain was place those replaced by rose garden with seats around all direction. Furthermore, on west direction where stage for musicians was build those modified by building new amphitheatre for concert.
Moving towards to east side, it have one pond for water plants, rose garden, seats, glasshouse was constructed which replaced by cafe, children's play area and water feature and also latest entrance underground car park added in east side. Moreover, the seats and rose garden which placed on all directions is removed and only single rose garden left which is on north west direction.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the park's transformation, such as the addition of the amphitheatre, cafe, and car park. However, the description is somewhat mechanical and lacks a clear, analytical overview. While the main changes are identified, the comparison between the two time periods is occasionally confusing due to grammatical inaccuracies, making it difficult to follow the spatial changes. The summary of the 'main features' is present, but the development of these points is limited, and some details are slightly inaccurate (e.g., the description of the rose garden placement). To improve, focus on grouping features more logically and ensuring the overview highlights the most significant trends rather than just listing changes.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the progression of ideas is often hindered by awkward phrasing and mechanical transitions. While cohesive devices like 'At the outset' and 'Moving towards' are used, they are sometimes applied incorrectly or lead to confusing sentence structures. The referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly when describing the movement of features from one side of the park to the other. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words more naturally and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus that flows logically into the next.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but remains quite basic and repetitive. There are several instances of word-choice errors and awkward collocations, such as 'pictorial representation illustrates about' and 'latest water feature introduce'. The range of vocabulary is limited, relying heavily on simple descriptors. To improve, you should aim to use more precise terminology for describing maps and changes, such as 'replaced by', 'transformed into', or 'underwent significant development'. Expanding your range of synonyms and focusing on correct word forms will help you convey information more accurately and professionally.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Issues include incorrect verb tenses ('was build', 'was place'), subject-verb agreement errors ('it have one pond'), and missing articles. These errors are noticeable and occasionally cause the reader to pause, though they do not completely impede communication. To improve, pay closer attention to passive voice constructions, which are essential for describing map changes, and ensure consistent tense usage when comparing past and present states. Proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement will also significantly improve your score.
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