Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

This chart illustrates the changes of Grange park, how it looked in 1920, and how it look now. There are many envolvement in this park for current time such as, rose garden, children play area, amphitheatre for concerts and cafe.

In 1920, places were include as we see in picture for instance, seats, glass house, pond for water plants, and stage of musicians. After later it changed for example, water feature included and under ground parking. Rose garden is same now, but its place has been tend. Cafe is also new feature for now duration. Moreover, entrance place is same. Fountain, seats, pond for water plants, glass house and singing place is remove for now.

Which location are addition, after fifty year these are amphitheatre for concerts, tea area, water views, and parking for traffic. Flowers garden is tend slightly furthermore, seats has been removed for now,

In summary, there were many positions were in it but, after some duration it transformed in advance.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to describe the changes in Grange Park, but it fails to provide a clear overview or a logical summary of the main trends. While it mentions several features, the information is often inaccurate or confusingly presented (e.g., claiming the rose garden is the same but its place has been 'tend'). The description lacks a clear comparison between the two time periods, and the reporting of features is disjointed. The response does not effectively highlight the significant transformations, such as the removal of the glasshouse and the addition of the amphitheatre, in a way that allows the reader to easily visualize the changes.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is weak. The use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inappropriate, such as 'After later it changed' and 'Which location are addition'. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult to follow the comparison between 1920 and the present day. The sentences are often disconnected, and the lack of logical flow between the introduction, body, and summary hinders the overall coherence of the report.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often imprecise. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'envolvement' instead of 'developments', 'singing place' for the bandstand, and 'place has been tend'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe the visual data accurately. Some terms are used incorrectly, which occasionally causes confusion for the reader. To improve, you should focus on learning specific vocabulary related to describing maps and changes, such as 'demolished', 'constructed', 'relocated', and 'expanded'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement ('seats has been removed'), article usage, and sentence structure ('Which location are addition'). The range of structures is very limited, relying mostly on simple sentences with incorrect phrasing. Complex structures are attempted but are almost always faulty, such as 'This chart illustrates the changes of Grange park, how it looked in 1920, and how it look now.' Significant improvement in basic sentence construction and verb tense consistency is required.

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