Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-09
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The layout map comapare the major changes happened in public park from its inuaguration year 1920. Their are multiple upgrades took place in the park from 1920 to current year.
Overall, Some are went under change and other remains same for ages. For example, Fountain which was at the center in 1920 was replaced with rose garden. And pond repalced with children's play area and like this their are lot of changes in public park.
To begin with, basics of park like both the entrance were remains same. Considering left side of fountain, Stages fo musicians followed by some seatings and southern rose garden were demolished and a amphitheatre was contructed for concerts. And fountian was repalced with rose garden to give a postive impact to whole park, followed by seats arround garden.
On other hand, from right side of th layout rosegarden beside arnold avenue was replaced with a Cafe. Additionally, glasshouse at right side of eldon street was replace with a beuatiful water features and seates are remove from the glasshouse area. Moreover, pond was reconstructed with children's play area. At last entrance for car parking was build underground to get relive from trafic problems near public park.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the park's transformation, identifying key changes such as the replacement of the fountain and the addition of the amphitheatre and underground parking. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. The overview is quite vague, stating that 'some are went under change', which lacks the precision expected at higher bands. While the main features are reported, the comparison between the two time periods could be more analytical. The response would benefit from a more structured approach to grouping the changes (e.g., structural additions vs. removals) to better highlight the evolution of the park's layout.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For instance, the phrase 'and like this their are lot of changes' is informal and lacks the necessary academic tone. Transitions between sentences are sometimes abrupt, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as the use of 'both the entrance' without specifying which ones. While there is a logical progression from the general overview to specific details, the flow is hindered by repetitive sentence structures and awkward phrasing that disrupts the overall coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the sophistication required for a higher band. There are several spelling errors, such as 'comapare', 'inuaguration', 'repalced', and 'beuatiful', which distract the reader. The range of vocabulary is limited, relying on basic verbs like 'replaced' and 'remains'. While the student attempts to describe specific features like 'amphitheatre' and 'glasshouse', the lack of precise collocations and the presence of persistent spelling mistakes limit the score. To improve, the student should focus on using more varied descriptive language and ensuring accuracy in spelling.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but grammatical errors are frequent and pervasive. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('Their are multiple upgrades', 'both the entrance were remains'), incorrect verb tenses ('Some are went under change'), and missing articles. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with errors in capitalization and sentence boundaries. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and sentence construction prevents the response from reaching a higher band. More attention to proofreading and mastering basic sentence patterns is essential.
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