Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The picture illustrates the changes in the Grange park which was opened in 1920.

In 1920, a Fountain was build in center of park while there was double sided entrance to park from North and South direction. Seats were arranged near the boundary wall of park for the comfort of visitors. The Rose gardens were gardened near the three corners except sooth-east enhanced the beauty of park. In the left corner, stage for musicians was established for entertainment of local. The glasshouse and pond for water plants were present on the right side of park in opposite direction.

In modern days, there is a underground entrance for car parking. The Rose garden shifted in center of the park which is surrounded by seats. Children play area and cafe is in right upper corner of park while lower area is occupied by water feature. In the upper left of park there is another rose garden and an Amphitheatre is also updated for music concerts.

To summarize, in contrast to 1920, cafe, children play area and car parking are the development features of Grange park.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response covers the main features of the park in both 1920 and the present day. You have successfully identified key changes, such as the relocation of the rose garden and the addition of modern facilities like the cafe and underground parking. However, the overview is somewhat weak; while you mention some developments in the summary, a more cohesive overview statement at the beginning would better highlight the most significant transformations, such as the shift from a more formal, aesthetic layout to a functional, modern recreational space. The description of the 1920 layout is clear, but some spatial relationships could be more precisely defined to improve the clarity of the comparison.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is logically organized into an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a summary. The progression of ideas is generally clear, moving from the historical state to the modern day. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally repetitive. For instance, phrases like 'in the left corner' and 'in the right upper corner' are used, but the transition between sentences could be smoother. The paragraphing is appropriate, but the internal cohesion within the second body paragraph could be improved by using more varied linking words to connect the various new features of the park.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to describe the changes, using terms like 'underground entrance', 'water feature', and 'Amphitheatre'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'Fountain was build' (should be 'built') and 'gardened near' (which is not standard usage). The phrase 'opposite direction' is also slightly vague in this context. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise descriptive verbs and nouns that naturally collocate with the features of a park, rather than relying on simpler, occasionally awkward phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors that persist throughout the text. Examples include 'a Fountain was build' (passive voice error), 'in center of park' (missing articles), and 'local' used as a noun instead of 'locals'. Additionally, there are minor punctuation and preposition errors, such as 'except sooth-east' (should be 'except for the south-east'). While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on article usage and subject-verb agreement would significantly improve your accuracy.

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