Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-10
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The maps illustrates the information of how looks like grange park after redeveloped in 1920.
Overall, the Arnold Avenue consists of several changes. The amphitheatre for concerts room, children's play area and water feature are added.
To begin with, in 1920, the fountain was located in the centre of the park, which has demolished and rose garden has built in place of it. Furthermore, on the northeast corner, the pond for water plants had situated and it has converted into children's play area. The stage for musicians was placed in eastern side of the park, which has been transformed in Amphitheatre for concerts.
Remaining data, in 1920,for visitors seats had placed around the park but those are arranged surrounding rose garden. Inaddition, the rose garden was located on the right hand side of northen entrance, it has altered into a cafe. The glasshouse was developed in the south side, it has torn down and constructed a water feature.Besides of, there is no changed in an both entrance and rose garden which is located on the northernside.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the park's transformation, such as the addition of the amphitheatre and the replacement of the fountain with a rose garden. However, the report contains several factual inaccuracies regarding the locations and changes, such as the claim that the rose garden was not changed, which contradicts the visual evidence. While the overview is present, it lacks a clear summary of the most significant trends, such as the shift from a more natural, open layout to a more structured, facility-oriented park. The information is presented, but the lack of precision in describing the spatial changes limits the effectiveness of the response.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'Remaining data' to start a paragraph or 'Besides of' to introduce a point. Referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult to track which specific area of the park is being described. The progression of ideas is somewhat disjointed, as the transition between the 1920 layout and the current layout is not always smooth, leading to a repetitive feel in the description of the changes.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision required for a higher band. There are several instances of awkward word choices and incorrect collocations, such as 'concerts room' instead of 'amphitheatre' or 'had situated' instead of 'was situated'. The student attempts to use descriptive language, but the phrasing is often unnatural. Spelling and word-choice errors are frequent enough to occasionally cause the reader to pause, though they do not completely impede the overall understanding of the changes described.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Issues include incorrect verb tenses (e.g., 'which has demolished' instead of 'which has been demolished'), subject-verb agreement errors, and missing articles. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with commas. While the meaning is generally clear, the high frequency of errors in basic sentence construction and tense usage prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. The student needs to focus on consistent tense usage when describing past and present states.
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