Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

the plant told a public park that it built in 1920 first and compare in today then firstly in 1920 the GRANGE PARK ARNOLD AVENUE seats in rose garden and even stage for musicians near rose garden after the ENTRANCE DESCRIBE THE LOCATION OF Fountain and Thirdly pound for water and this things across seats Glasshouse after THAT Entrance called ELDON STREET AND after that Seats with Rose garden and second seats near Rose garden. and today GRANGE PARK ARNOLD AVENUE same firstly Rose garden change and new building stand this building is Amphitheatrefor concertsafter that Entrance would change and built seats and cover Rose garden from seats some area ago a beautiful Cafe built and new thing built for childern play area when children free they play some games and forthly Entrance underground car park near and built Water feature that place see very impressable and everyone atract this place and finally ELDON STREET SAME IN 1920 in conclusion in !(@) and compare today some changes and some things same today.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to describe the changes between the 1920 and current park plans. However, the information is presented in a fragmented and disorganized manner, making it difficult to follow the comparison. While some features like the rose garden, cafe, and car park are mentioned, the lack of a clear overview and the failure to group information logically mean the main features are not effectively highlighted. The response lacks a clear structure, and the description of locations is often confusing or incomplete. To improve, you should provide a clear introduction, a summary of the main trends, and separate paragraphs for the 1920 layout and the current layout, ensuring all key features are clearly identified and compared.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response lacks paragraphing, which is essential for organizing a report. The flow of ideas is disjointed, and the use of cohesive devices is either absent or misused (e.g., 'Thirdly', 'forthly'). The text reads as a series of loosely connected, often run-on sentences rather than a coherent summary. There is no clear progression of information, and the lack of punctuation makes it difficult to determine where one idea ends and another begins. To improve, you must use clear paragraph breaks to separate your introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. Additionally, focus on using transition words like 'whereas', 'in contrast', or 'subsequently' to link your ideas logically.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and often repetitive. There are significant issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'the plant told' instead of 'the plan shows' and 'this things' instead of 'these features'. The use of 'impressable' is incorrect, and the phrasing is generally informal and imprecise. Many words are used incorrectly, which occasionally impedes the reader's understanding of the specific park features. To improve, focus on learning specific vocabulary related to describing maps and changes, such as 'demolished', 'constructed', 'relocated', and 'transformed'. You should also practice using more precise nouns to describe the park's facilities.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent and severe grammatical errors that make the text difficult to read. There is a lack of basic sentence structure, with many run-on sentences and a complete absence of proper punctuation. Verb tenses are inconsistent, and there are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement and article usage (e.g., 'new building stand' instead of 'a new building stands'). The range of grammatical structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple, poorly constructed clauses. To improve, you must focus on the basics of sentence construction: ensuring every sentence has a clear subject and verb, using periods to separate distinct thoughts, and practicing consistent tense usage when describing past and present states.

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