Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The plans below present a general park when it first opened in 1920 and it's current look.
Overall, although there were some additions, changes on how Grange park looked in 1920 and how it looked today, but still some rooms or offices are unchanged, for instance Arnold Avenue and Eldon street still retain it's positions. There were also an introduction of entrance underground car park in today's park, there were also the elimination of stage for music and fountain.
In the year 1920, the public park has three Rose garden with seats and entrance in between the two on the top. It has five seats around the park. Glasshouse and Pounds for water plants are opposite each others.
However, the park today has a four seats around Rose garden in the center, an addition of children's play area water feature were included. Amphitheatre for concert is also included.
Furthermore, in the current park Rose garden and seats were used to replaced fountain,while entrances remain the same. Cafe stand is also included in the present park.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the park in 1920 and today, identifying key changes such as the addition of the amphitheatre and the removal of the fountain. However, the report is somewhat disjointed and lacks a clear, analytical overview. The description of the 1920 layout is slightly confusing, and some details, such as the 'rooms or offices' mentioned, are not clearly supported by the provided visual data. To reach a higher band, ensure that the overview clearly synthesises the most significant trends rather than just listing individual features. The comparison between the two time periods needs to be more structured to ensure the reader can easily follow the transformation of the park.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical flow is hindered by awkward transitions and repetitive sentence structures. While some cohesive devices like 'However' and 'Furthermore' are used, they are occasionally placed incorrectly or do not effectively link the ideas. The referencing is sometimes unclear, such as the mention of 'two on the top' without specifying what is being referred to. Paragraphing is present, but the internal structure of the paragraphs lacks a smooth progression of information. Improving the use of cohesive devices and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear thematic focus would significantly enhance the coherence of the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and variety required for a higher band. There are several instances of inaccurate word choice, such as referring to park features as 'rooms or offices' and using 'Pounds' instead of 'ponds'. The phrasing is often repetitive, and the range of vocabulary is limited to basic descriptions. To improve, you should focus on using more precise terminology related to maps and urban planning, such as 'replaced by', 'transformed into', or 'situated in the north-east corner'. Expanding your range of descriptive adjectives and nouns will help convey information more effectively.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'the public park has three Rose garden' and 'it's current look' (should be 'its'). The use of articles is also inconsistent throughout the text. While there is an attempt to use complex structures, they are often faulty, leading to awkward phrasing. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, particularly the correct use of singular and plural forms, possessive pronouns, and articles. Proofreading for these common errors will help you achieve a more accurate and professional tone.
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