Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The plans illustrate how Grange Park changed since its opening in 1920.
Overall, public park has undergone substantial development. The most notable changes include the transformation of stage for musicians to amphitheatre, removal of pond for waterplanes and glasshouse, and conversion of lountain to a rose garden.
In 1920, rose gardens were located in the south-vest and north-vest side and of the park, while the remaining garden was to sivated in the north south-east, right next to the north entrance. Pond, S. Pond and glasshouse positioned on at the north-east and south-east of the park. Stage for musicians was found right in the middle of rose gardens on the east side. Seats were all spread across the edges of the park, between the entrance and 2 of the 3 rose gardens, pond and glasshouse. Fountain was centered in the park.
Today, the former stage has been completely redeveloped into an amphitheatre for concerts. Rose garden at the north-west stayed same, while the opposing garden has been pulled down. The remaining garden has been replaced with a café. The Pond for water planes and glasshouse are converted into a play area for children and a water feature.
Another significant dep development is the construction of underground car park. Entrance to the car park is located in at the w south-east side of the park.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
The response covers all key features of the task, including the major transformations such as the amphitheatre, the play area, and the car park. You have successfully identified the main trends and made relevant comparisons between 1920 and the present day. The overview is clear and highlights the most significant changes. To reach a higher band, ensure that all spatial descriptions are precise; for instance, the location of the rose gardens in 1920 is slightly confusing due to the terminology used. Overall, you have provided a well-structured summary that addresses the requirements of the prompt effectively.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The essay is logically organized, with a clear introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs that group information by time period and theme. You use cohesive devices such as 'In 1920', 'Today', and 'Another significant development' to guide the reader. However, some transitions are slightly mechanical, and there are minor issues with referencing, such as the repetitive use of 'the park' and 'the garden'. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the historical state from the current state, which helps the reader follow the progression of changes clearly.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'substantial development', 'transformation', and 'redeveloped'. There are some minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'lountain' (likely a typo for fountain) and 'sivated' (situated). Additionally, some phrasing is slightly unnatural, such as 'opposing garden has been pulled down'—'removed' or 'cleared' would be more precise in this context. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning, incorporating more varied and precise descriptive language would elevate the score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical slips, particularly with articles ('the' is frequently missing, e.g., 'transformation of stage', 'removal of pond') and prepositions ('in at the w south-east side'). There are also some minor spelling and typographical errors like 'south-vest' and 'lountain'. These errors do not impede communication, but they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on article usage and proofreading for typos will significantly improve your accuracy.
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