Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The plans illustrate a public park when it first opened in a year of 1920 and the same park today there are totally changing and add main features in it.

Overall,there are many alternation in the architecture of Grange Park these modification include Rose garden and Children play area also Entrance underground car park and other many kinds of features.

Grange Park in 1920 had a less features in it there was lack of facilities .First of all,the diagram illustrate that there is a Entrance on the ARNOLD AVENUE on the left side Seats are available on this side also Rose garden and middle area cover with fountain and on the corner Pond for water plants.There are some crucial places.

GRANGE PARK about today here a lot of changing in it .The most important alternation include the Amphitheatre for concerts and also adding the cafe in it and the place of one corner is surrounded by Water feature and behind this there is a underground car park.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main features of the park in both 1920 and the present day. However, the overview is somewhat weak, as it lists features rather than highlighting the most significant trends, such as the transition from a more natural, open space to a facility-heavy park. While the key changes (amphitheatre, cafe, car park) are mentioned, the description lacks precision in spatial referencing, making it difficult for the reader to visualize the layout. To improve, focus on grouping features logically and providing a more analytical summary of the transformation rather than just listing items.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes inaccurate, such as the abrupt transition 'First of all' which does not fit the context of describing a map. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and the flow between sentences is often disjointed. The punctuation is inconsistent, particularly with spacing after commas and periods, which disrupts the logical progression of the text. Improving the use of linking words like 'whereas', 'in contrast', or 'subsequently' would enhance the overall flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The range of vocabulary is limited and repetitive. Words like 'features', 'changing', and 'alternation' are used frequently and sometimes incorrectly (e.g., 'alternation' instead of 'alterations'). There is a lack of precise vocabulary to describe map features, such as 'located', 'situated', 'adjacent to', or 'replaced'. Some word choices are awkward, such as 'less features in it'. To reach a higher band, you should focus on using more specific terminology related to urban planning and map description, and ensure that word forms are used correctly in context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response relies heavily on simple sentence structures. There are frequent grammatical errors, including missing articles ('a Entrance', 'the pond'), incorrect verb tenses, and subject-verb agreement issues ('there are totally changing'). Punctuation is a significant issue, with many missing spaces after punctuation marks and incorrect capitalization (e.g., 'ARNOLD AVENUE'). While the meaning is generally clear, the high frequency of basic errors in grammar and punctuation prevents the response from reaching a higher band. Focusing on sentence variety and proofreading for basic errors would be highly beneficial.

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