Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The two maps details data about the main changes in a public area when it first opened between 1920 and nowadays.
In general, it appears that the grange park has been developed , with several entertainment facilities being added.
One striking change is that fountain in the middle side of the park has been demolished to make place for rose garden and severall seats. Another interesting point is that the stage for musicians has witnessed destruction and then amphitheatre has been build instead of it.
If we look at the north-west side of the park, there was the old glasshouse, but it has been knocked down to establish a new water feature for entertainment. The seats near the glasshouse were pulled down and the addition entrance underground car park has been added in place of them. One of the notable features is that the old water plants' pond and rose garden were destructed to give way to larger play area for children and cafe for relaxation.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
Javob xaritalarning asosiy xususiyatlarini qamrab oladi va issiqxonaning o'rnini bosish hamda amfiteatrning qo'shilishi kabi asosiy o'zgarishlarni aniqlaydi. Biroq, sharh biroz qisqa va tahliliyroq bo'lishi mumkin edi. Asosiy xususiyatlar keltirilgan bo'lsa-da, o'zgarishlar tavsifida aniq, qiyosiy tuzilma yetishmaydi. Masalan, o'zgarishlarni joylashuviga ko'ra (shimoli-g'arbiy va markaziy) guruhlash yaxshi strategiya, ammo oxiridagi 'notable features' haqidagi xulosa biroz uzilib qolgandek tuyuladi. Yaxshilash uchun sharhda eng muhim tendensiyalar, masalan, tabiiy/bezakli bog'dan ko'ngilochar va zamonaviy inshootlarga qaratilgan bog'ga o'tish kabi jihatlar yoritilganiga ishonch hosil qiling.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
Javob paragraflarga ajratilgan, bu esa o'quvchiga g'oyalar rivojini kuzatib borishga yordam beradi. Biroq, bog'lovchi vositalardan foydalanish biroz mexanik va ba'zan takrorlanuvchi. 'One striking change' va 'Another interesting point' kabi iboralar g'oyalar o'rtasida o'tish uchun samarali ishlatilgan, ammo paragraflar ichidagi ichki bog'liqlikni yaxshilash mumkin. Masalan, oxirgi paragrafda ular o'rtasida aniq mantiqiy bog'liqliksiz bir nechta o'zgarishlar sanab o'tilgan, bu esa matnni yaxlit hikoya emas, balki ro'yxat kabi his qildiradi. Referensiya va turli o'tish so'zlaridan foydalanishni yaxshilash umumiy ravonlikni oshiradi.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
Lug'at boyligi odatda topshiriq uchun yetarli bo'lib, o'quvchiga o'zgarishlarni aniq tasvirlash imkonini beradi. 'demolished', 'witnessed destruction' va 'amphitheatre' kabi kamroq uchraydigan so'zlardan foydalanishga urinishlar mavjud. Biroq, noo'rin so'z tanlash va birikma xatolari, masalan, 'middle side of the park' (o'rniga 'center'), 'make place for' (o'rniga 'make way for') va 'addition entrance' (o'rniga 'additional') kabi holatlar bir necha bor uchraydi. Bundan tashqari, 'destructed' standart atama emas; 'removed' yoki 'replaced' mosroq bo'lardi. Ushbu birikmalarni to'g'rilash yozuv aniqligini sezilarli darajada oshiradi.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
Javob oddiy va murakkab gap tuzilmalarining aralashmasini o'z ichiga oladi. Ma'no odatda tushunarli bo'lsa-da, yozuv sifatiga putur yetkazadigan tez-tez uchraydigan grammatik xatolar mavjud. Misollar: 'The two maps details data' (ega-kesim moslashuvi), 'amphitheatre has been build' (noto'g'ri sifatdosh shakli) va 'the addition entrance... has been added' (noto'g'ri so'z shakli). Tinish belgilari ham nomutanosib, vergullardan oldin keraksiz bo'sh joylar mavjud. Yuqoriroq balga erishish uchun o'quvchi ega-kesim moslashuvi, majhul nisbatdagi to'g'ri fe'l shakllari va asosiy xatolarni yo'qotish uchun ehtiyotkorlik bilan qayta o'qib chiqishga e'tibor qaratishi kerak.
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