Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given map chart shows that a public park began in 1920 and its current layout.
Overall, It is evident that, in current time addition of some features like, children play area, in 1920 the park, amphitheatre for concerts, water feature and entrance underground car park and a cafe. some facilities like rose garden, seats, entrance are remained unchanged.
It can be clearly seen that, in 1920 the park was not developed that time. however, there were two main entrances one from Arnold avenue located in north side of park and other from Eldon street located in south side. Both entrances led a fountain positioned at the centre of park. In the left side of the fountain was stage for musicians and above north side of musicians was rose garden located and right side of the fountain was a pond for water plants and left side was the rose garden situated. the right of thr south entrance was glasshouse. while, there were 5 seats in the park two left side of the park and other 3 located in different
the current plans several amenities has been introduced, including a third underground entrance situated in south side of the park. whereas, rose garden and pond for water plants converted into cafe and children play area. the grass house was replaced by water features . the stage for musicians displaced by amphitheatre for concerts.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the park in 1920 and today, identifying key changes such as the introduction of the amphitheatre and the conversion of the rose garden. However, the report is somewhat disorganized. The overview is cluttered and lacks clarity, and the description of the 1920 layout is repetitive and confusing, particularly regarding the location of the rose garden and the fountain. While the main features are identified, the comparison between the two time periods could be more structured and analytical to better highlight the transformation of the park.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the internal structure is weak. The overview is poorly integrated, and the transition between the 1920 description and the current layout is abrupt. Cohesive devices are used, but they are often mechanical or misused, such as the repetitive use of 'left side' and 'right side' without clear reference points. The paragraphing is inconsistent, with some sentences appearing as fragments or disconnected thoughts, which hinders the overall flow of information.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The range of vocabulary is adequate to convey the basic information, but it is limited and often repetitive. There are noticeable errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'grass house' instead of 'glasshouse' and 'in current time addition of' which is awkward. The student attempts to use specific terminology like 'amphitheatre' and 'amenities', but the overall control is inconsistent, and some phrasing is unnatural, which occasionally impacts the clarity of the description.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and some complex structures, but grammatical accuracy is a significant issue. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'several amenities has been introduced'), missing articles, and awkward sentence construction. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with several run-on sentences and misplaced commas. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and sentence structure prevents the writing from reaching a higher band.
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