Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-13
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given graphs show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and same park opened nowadays.
Looking first graphs, name of park was GRANGE PARK. In the middle of the park two entrance gate first gate name was Arnold Avenue its direction of north and second gate name was Eldon Street its position of south. Moreover, fountain was stand in middle of park and north entrance gate left side made was rose garden and right side made seats people standing and feel better. And fountain right side was a stage for musician and the rose garden further seats. On the other hand, see the south entrance its left side same as north gate and its right side made glasshouse, its left side seats for relaxation and north side makes rose garden and pond for water plants.
Looking further next diagram, today diagram entrance gate is the same as directions and in the middle of park makes rose garden an around of four seats and replace the stage of musicians for the amphitheater for concerts and its right side one rose garden same as in the past and same position. Moreover, in the entrance of north gate and left side one cafe and next here children's play area. On the other hand, entrance of south in the right side is a water feature and outside of the park in east side an entrance underground car park.
In conclusion, many changes 1920 grange park and present time park.
Many places replace and provide many facilities.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the two maps, identifying key changes such as the replacement of the stage with an amphitheater and the addition of a cafe and car park. However, the description is often confusing and lacks a clear overview. The student struggles to accurately describe the spatial relationships, often using vague phrasing like 'its left side same as north gate'. While the main features are identified, the lack of a clear, cohesive summary of the overall transformation prevents a higher score. The report is descriptive but lacks the analytical precision required for a higher band.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the internal structure is weak. The progression of ideas is often disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the layout of the park. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Moreover' and 'On the other hand', but they are often applied mechanically or incorrectly, such as using 'On the other hand' to introduce a new location rather than a contrast. Referencing is frequently unclear, with pronouns like 'its' lacking a definite antecedent, which hinders the flow of information.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic descriptors like 'made', 'side', and 'gate'. There is little attempt to use precise terminology for map description (e.g., 'situated', 'adjacent to', 'transformed', 'replaced by'). Phrases like 'people standing and feel better' are unnatural and imprecise. While the meaning is generally conveyed, the lack of variety and the frequent misuse of collocations (e.g., 'north side makes rose garden') limit the score. The student needs to focus on topic-specific vocabulary related to urban planning and spatial description.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are consistent issues with article usage ('in middle of park'), subject-verb agreement ('fountain was stand'), and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or run-on, lacking proper punctuation. While there is an attempt to use complex structures, they are often faulty, such as 'its left side seats for relaxation and north side makes rose garden'. The control of basic grammar is inconsistent, and the lack of accurate punctuation makes the text difficult to parse.
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