Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The plans compare a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Overall, the area underwent significant redevelopment, with several new facilities being added and existing buildings being relocated or demolished. Furthermore, several new recreational and tourist facilities were introduced, including a children's play area, a café, and an amphitheatre for concerts.

Regarding Grange Park in 1920, the area consisted of several facilities, including stage for musicians, fountain, and glasshouse. pond for water plants was located in the northern part of the park, while glasshouse could be found in the southern section. In addition, rose garden was situated next to stage for musicians.

Turning to the changes that took place, the park underwent significant redevelopment. Glasshouse was demolished and replaced by water feature, while rose garden was relocated to the center. Furthermore, several new facilities, including a children's play area, a café, and a rose garden, were added.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response provides a clear overview of the main changes, such as the redevelopment of the park and the addition of new facilities. You have successfully identified key features like the glasshouse, the rose garden, and the new water feature. However, the report is somewhat brief and could be improved by providing more specific details about the locations of the new facilities (e.g., the café and children's play area) to better illustrate the spatial changes. While the main features are covered, the comparison could be more detailed to fully satisfy the requirements for a higher band.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is logically organized into an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs focusing on the two time periods. The use of cohesive devices such as 'Regarding', 'Turning to', and 'Furthermore' helps to guide the reader through the information. However, there is a lack of variety in the cohesive devices used, and some transitions feel slightly mechanical. Additionally, the paragraphing is clear, but the flow between the description of 1920 and the subsequent changes could be smoother to ensure a more cohesive progression of ideas.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have used a range of vocabulary appropriate for describing maps, such as 'redevelopment', 'relocated', 'demolished', and 'amphitheatre'. However, there are noticeable omissions of articles (e.g., 'including stage for musicians', 'pond for water plants', 'glasshouse could be found'). These errors in article usage and some repetitive phrasing limit the score. To reach a higher band, ensure that you use articles correctly with singular countable nouns and attempt to vary your vocabulary further to avoid repeating the same terms within the same paragraph.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly regarding the omission of articles (e.g., 'including stage for musicians' should be 'including a stage for musicians'). There are also some issues with sentence construction, such as 'Glasshouse was demolished', which requires an article. While these errors do not impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on article usage and ensuring subjects are properly introduced with determiners will significantly improve your accuracy.

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