Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The plan illustrates Grange park when it first opened in 1920 and the other plan shows the view of the public park at present.

Overall, there are numerous changes made in the public park such as amphitheatre for concerts, water feature, children's play area, cafe, and the entrance underground car park. While the original entrance remained unchanged.

In the west side of the public park, there is a dome for the amphitheatre for concerts that was known to be a stage for musicians in the year 1920. While at the center, rose garden is located and they are surrounded with seats on the 4 sides of the garden. There is also a small cafe on the right side of the north entrance and beside it is a children's play area which was a pond for water plants before. There is also a water feature near the entrance underground car park which are both new renovations in the park.

The entrance to Grange park which is in Arnold avenue and Eldon street remained unchanged since 1920. Also, the rose garden on the left side of the entrance in Arnold avenue.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers the main features of the maps, identifying key changes such as the amphitheatre, cafe, and car park. However, the report lacks a clear, analytical overview of the most significant trends. The description of locations is sometimes imprecise (e.g., 'west side' vs 'center'), and the comparison between the 1920 and present-day layouts could be more integrated. While the main features are highlighted, the response would benefit from a more structured approach to comparing the two time periods, rather than listing changes in a somewhat disjointed manner. The summary of the original entrance remaining unchanged is a good observation, but the overall development of the information is limited.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and repetitive (e.g., 'There is also' is used multiple times). The transition between the description of the 1920 layout and the current layout is occasionally abrupt. While the logical progression is generally clear, the paragraphing could be more effective; for instance, the final paragraph is quite brief and seems to repeat information already mentioned or implied. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring smoother transitions between sentences would enhance the flow of the report.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing the student to describe the park features effectively. There are some attempts at less common vocabulary, such as 'amphitheatre' and 'renovations'. However, there are instances of imprecise word choice and minor collocation errors, such as 'dome for the amphitheatre' (the amphitheatre itself is the structure) and 'water plants' (aquatic plants). The range is sufficient to convey meaning, but it lacks the precision and flexibility required for a higher band. Expanding the range of descriptive verbs and nouns related to map analysis would improve the quality of the response.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The student uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While many sentences are clear, there are several grammatical errors, such as 'they are surrounded with seats' (should be 'surrounded by') and 'the entrance underground car park which are both new' (subject-verb agreement error). Punctuation is generally functional, but there are minor issues with article usage and prepositional phrases. The errors present do not significantly impede communication, but they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of prepositions would help improve accuracy.

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