Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The plans describes a public park that cultivate between when it Establish in 1920 and today changes shown the park .

Overall, There are many Modification between establish park and now park. There are a lot of places modified by today park.

The plans have been illustrates , The Stages for musicians has replaced by the Amphitheatre for concerts. In 1920 park had surrounding by rose garden for three corners that should be altered by Cafe and Rose garden . The main Entrance has no change in nowdays.

The Glasshouse could be modified by Water feature. and park bottom corner were present the Rose garden and Seats both removed by todays. The main Modification occur Fountain can replaced by Rose garden an d then surrounding a four pair of seats. The was Pound for water plants altered by childrens area . And today parks have been built by Entrance underground car park.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response identifies the main features of the park's transformation, such as the replacement of the stage with an amphitheatre and the addition of a car park. However, the report is somewhat mechanical and lacks a clear, analytical overview. While the key changes are mentioned, the description of the 1920 layout is confusing, particularly the reference to the rose garden being in 'three corners'. The summary of changes is present, but the lack of precise reporting and the inclusion of some inaccurate details (e.g., the fountain being replaced by a rose garden) limit the effectiveness of the response. It covers the task requirements but lacks the depth and clarity expected for a higher band.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is often inaccurate or repetitive, such as the frequent use of 'today' or 'modified by'. The referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the spatial changes between the two maps. Paragraphing is present, but the internal structure of the paragraphs lacks flow, and the transition between the 1920 features and the modern features is disjointed. The overall arrangement is coherent enough to follow, but the mechanical nature of the linking words hinders the flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and word form, such as 'cultivate' instead of 'changed', 'establish' instead of 'established', and 'today park' instead of 'the current park'. The student attempts to use specific terminology like 'amphitheatre' and 'glasshouse', but these are often used in grammatically incorrect contexts. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the changes with precision, and the persistent errors in word formation and collocation occasionally cause difficulty for the reader.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that affect readability. There are significant issues with verb tenses (e.g., 'The plans describes', 'The plans have been illustrates'), passive voice construction ('could be modified by', 'can replaced by'), and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or lack proper subject-verb agreement. While there is an attempt to use complex structures, they are almost always faulty, leading to a lack of clarity. The frequency of errors is high, and they occur throughout the text, which significantly impacts the overall accuracy of the writing.

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