Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-14
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The diagram below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park nowadays.
Overall, these are lot of change in nowadays map but the location of one rose garden and entrance are same since 1920.
It is crystal clear from the diagram, west of the diagram there was a stage of musicians in 1920 but in modern days there are a amphitheatre for concerts. There was the seats at the corner of map in 1920 but nowadays it will remove from their. Additionally, there was a fountain in the centre of park but nowadays it is replaced by rose garden, and around the rose garden there are seating areas.
Remaining data shows that, in 1920 there was a rose garden on
the north position of map but nowadays there will be a cafe. Ponds for water plants is replaced by children's play area in modern days. Moreover, in nowadays there are a water feature the after the right of entrance but it 1920 there was a glasshouse in park. The entrance underground car park is also add in map nowadays.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
You have successfully identified the main features of the park in both 1920 and today, including the rose garden, the amphitheatre, and the new car park. You provided a clear overview and made relevant comparisons. However, the response is slightly hindered by some inaccuracies in reporting the data; for instance, you mentioned a 'rose garden' in the north in 1920, whereas the map shows a 'rose garden' in the centre today and a 'rose garden' in the north in 1920. While you covered the main points, the precision of your reporting could be improved to ensure the reader can accurately visualise the changes described.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the progression of your ideas. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Additionally', 'Moreover', and 'Overall' to link your points. However, the flow is occasionally disrupted by awkward phrasing and repetitive sentence structures. The referencing is sometimes unclear, such as 'the after the right of entrance', which makes the spatial description difficult to follow. Improving the variety of your linking words and ensuring that your transitions between sentences are smoother will help you achieve a higher band score in this criterion.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You have an adequate range of vocabulary to describe the changes, using terms like 'amphitheatre', 'fountain', and 'glasshouse'. However, there are several instances of word-choice errors and unnatural collocations, such as 'in nowadays map' instead of 'in the current map' and 'will remove from their' instead of 'were removed from there'. These errors are noticeable but do not completely impede communication. To improve, focus on using more precise terminology for describing spatial changes and ensure you are using the correct tense when comparing past and present states.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
Your writing shows a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('The diagram below show', 'there are a amphitheatre') and incorrect tense usage ('nowadays it will remove', 'is also add in map'). These errors occur frequently and occasionally make the meaning slightly confusing. To progress, you should focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and ensuring consistent tense usage when describing historical versus current states. Proofreading for small articles ('a', 'the') would also significantly improve the accuracy of your sentences.
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