Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The plans illustrates a public park when it first time opened in 1920 and today's park after refurnished.

Overall, over a time major transformation took place at the Grange park, with several original feature removed or replaced by modern facilities. The three rose garden has been reduced in one central garden, while stage of musicians, fountain and glasshouse completely removed and built new infrastructure like cafe, playing area, water feature or so on.

In 1920, park had two entrance at opposite side, one on Arnold Avenue and other Eldon Street. The three rose garden were located in the corner side of garden. Fountain was situated in the center of garden, while on the left side stage of musicians were presented. On the right side of Eldon Street, one a Glasshouse was situated and opposite side of a glasshouse Pond for water plants was located with several seats around the park.

Today, The stage has been replaced with an Amphitheatre for concerts and the upper side of this one rose garden is present and another is locate in the center part of the park with seats around the rose garden. The entrance is remaining same direction with name. On the south side water feature and playing area are present. Cafe is built near the play area.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have successfully identified the main features of the park in 1920 and today, providing a clear overview of the transformation. You highlighted key changes, such as the removal of the glasshouse and the addition of the amphitheatre and cafe. However, the response lacks precision in some areas; for example, describing the rose gardens as 'reduced in one' is slightly confusing, and the phrase 'or so on' is too informal for an academic report. To reach a higher band, ensure that all comparisons are explicitly linked to the specific locations mentioned in the prompt, and avoid vague generalisations. Overall, you have covered the requirements of the task well.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is logically organised into an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs focusing on the two time periods. This structure helps the reader follow the progression of changes. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'In 1920' and 'Today', to signal shifts in time. However, the use of linking words is somewhat repetitive and occasionally mechanical. Some sentences feel disconnected, and the referencing is sometimes unclear, such as 'the upper side of this one rose garden'. Improving the variety of transition signals and ensuring that pronouns clearly refer back to their antecedents would enhance the flow of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'transformation', 'infrastructure', and 'amphitheatre' correctly. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'first time opened', 'after refurnished', and 'stage of musicians'. These errors occasionally hinder the natural flow of the text. To improve, focus on learning the correct verb forms and collocations associated with describing maps and changes. While you have enough vocabulary to convey your meaning, the lack of precision and the use of informal phrases like 'or so on' limit your score in this criterion.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Common issues include missing articles ('The plans illustrates', 'one a Glasshouse'), incorrect verb tenses ('The three rose garden has been reduced'), and subject-verb agreement errors. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to be noticeable. To achieve a higher band, you need to pay closer attention to basic grammar rules, particularly pluralisation and article usage. Increasing the variety of complex structures while maintaining accuracy will also help improve your score in this area.

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