Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The map illustrate the proposed changes for a green park site in 1920.

Overall, it is clear that many changes have been planned with the principal change being the change of stage for musicians and seats of grange park.

Looking at the map in more detail, at present time stage for musicians which was showed in 1920 right side center while it is totally change now it becomes with new name Amphitheatre for concerts. Whereas pond for water plants in 1920 convert into children's play area. Moreover side of Arnold Avenue entrance left side there was a rose garden in past years but in present it is cafe also in right side seats are available in olden days time while now there is no seating place.

Furthermore, center of grange park there was a fountain in 1920 but in present time it is completely change with rose garden and seats are convert in there all four sides. In contrast near Eldon street there was a glass house in left side while today it is change with water feature.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have successfully identified the main features of the park in both 1920 and the present day. You provided a clear overview and made relevant comparisons between the two time periods. However, the response lacks precision in describing locations and specific changes. For instance, stating 'it is totally change' or 'it is completely change' is vague and does not accurately describe the nature of the transformation. To improve, ensure you use more precise terminology for spatial relationships and specific park features, and avoid repetitive phrasing when describing the transition from the past to the present.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information. You use some cohesive devices such as 'whereas', 'moreover', and 'furthermore' to link ideas. However, the flow is occasionally disrupted by awkward phrasing and mechanical transitions. For example, the sentence 'it is also in right side seats are available in olden days time while now there is no seating place' is difficult to follow due to poor sentence structure. Improving the logical connection between sentences and ensuring that referencing (e.g., 'it', 'there') is clear will help elevate your score in this criterion.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it is somewhat repetitive and lacks the sophistication required for a higher band. You frequently use basic verbs like 'change' or 'convert' without variation. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'stage for musicians' (instead of 'bandstand') and 'olden days time'. To improve, focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary related to maps and urban planning, such as 'replaced by', 'transformed into', 'situated', or 'adjacent to'. Expanding your range of descriptive adjectives and nouns will make your writing more precise and engaging.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the response, particularly with verb tenses and subject-verb agreement. For example, 'The map illustrate' should be 'The map illustrates', and 'seats are convert' should be 'seats were converted'. You rely heavily on simple sentence structures, and your attempts at more complex sentences often contain errors that impede clarity, such as 'it becomes with new name Amphitheatre'. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and the correct use of passive voice, which is essential for describing changes in maps. Proofreading for tense consistency is also highly recommended.

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