Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The plans demonstrate the figures of a park today and when it first opened in 1920.

Overall, the park has been totally changed in comparison with the past figure. Many structures/ features inside the park were replaced by the new one. Many of them have been even removed and some other features have been added.

In1920, the park had the water fountain at the center of the park. However, it has been replace by the rose garden surrounded by the seats at four directions. But the entrance are at the two directions at center of south and north as in the past. There were three rose garden at north-west , south-west, and north-east of the garden; however, it has been removed at the south-west side and replaced by the cafe at north-east side. But it remains unchanged at the north-west side.

In the past, there were almost 5 seats around the garden. But they are all removed in the present. There was a glasshouse which is rep

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to summarize the main features of the park, but it is incomplete as the text cuts off abruptly mid-sentence. While you identify some changes, such as the fountain being replaced by a rose garden and the addition of a cafe, the description lacks a clear overview of the most significant transformations. The reporting of details is somewhat disorganized, and the failure to complete the task significantly impacts the ability to provide a full summary. To improve, ensure you cover all major changes and provide a cohesive summary of the park's evolution from 1920 to the present day.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow is hindered by the incomplete nature of the text. You use some cohesive devices like 'However' and 'In the past,' but the transitions between sentences are sometimes mechanical or repetitive. The referencing is occasionally unclear, such as when referring to 'the garden' or 'the entrance' without specifying which part of the park is being discussed. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear focus will help the reader follow your comparison more effectively.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the precision required for a higher band. You use basic terms like 'figures' and 'structures,' and there are some awkward collocations, such as 'at four directions' instead of 'on all four sides.' There are also minor errors in word choice, such as 'replace' instead of 'replaced.' To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more specific vocabulary related to maps and spatial descriptions, such as 'situated,' 'transformed,' 'demolished,' or 'converted.'

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Examples include 'the entrance are at the two directions' (subject-verb agreement) and 'there were three rose garden' (pluralization). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary spaces and missing articles. While the meaning is generally understandable, these errors are frequent enough to cause some distraction. Focus on proofreading for subject-verb agreement and plural forms to improve your accuracy.

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